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| Laid Back Otaku Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: my personal safehaven
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,790 | You were my light That lead my way It was your voice Giving me strength each day All those times We were with each other When we spoke I remember I would stutter Everyday I would pray Hoping you would get better Then when you passed away A part of me died The warmth from your touch now gone Leaving my heart as cold as ice Now here's my question Why did she have to pay the price? |
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| I have ACE nashers. Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: SunnyOl'England ;]
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![]() ![]() Credits: 4,268 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Nice poem but it couldv'e been longer. I like this stanza: Quote:
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Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: "Enigma"
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![]() ![]() Credits: 1,168 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Quote:
![]() To be honest the ending could have been written better. But overall this was a very well formed piece. Good job.
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Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: you have to deal with the grim before finding it
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![]() ![]() Credits: 436 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) i love the poem! is that your work? well great job! |
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Diamond in the Rough | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Quote:
^that'd be my favorite verse and I so dearly hope that the poem has nothing to do with real personal loss | |
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Elie Jelly Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Hell is an understatement
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![]() ![]() Credits: 2,051 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Quote:
very deep indeed...
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