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Jun 23, 2006, 12:31 PM
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| Laid Back Otaku  Join Date: Aug 2005 Location: my personal safehaven
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 Credits: 1,790 |  Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) You were my light That lead my way It was your voice Giving me strength each day All those times We were with each other When we spoke I remember I would stutter Everyday I would pray Hoping you would get better Then when you passed away A part of me died The warmth from your touch now gone Leaving my heart as cold as ice Now here's my question Why did she have to pay the price? |
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Jun 23, 2006, 05:23 PM
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| I have ACE nashers.  Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: SunnyOl'England ;]
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Credits: 4,268 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Nice poem but it couldv'e been longer. I like this stanza: Quote:
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Jun 23, 2006, 06:55 PM
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 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Apr 2006 Location: "Enigma"
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Credits: 1,168 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Quote:
 To be honest the ending could have been written better. But overall this was a very well formed piece. Good job.
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Jun 23, 2006, 08:19 PM
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| Diamond in the Rough  Join Date: Jan 2006 Location: you have to deal with the grim before finding it
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Credits: 436 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) i love the poem! is that your work? well great job! |
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Jun 23, 2006, 08:24 PM
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| Diamond in the Rough  | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Quote:
 ^that'd be my favorite verse and I so dearly hope that the poem has nothing to do with real personal loss | |
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Jun 23, 2006, 11:43 PM
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 Elie Jelly  Join Date: Feb 2006 Location: Hell is an understatement
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Credits: 2,051 | Re: Pain of Loss (Illness of Indemnity) Quote:
very deep indeed...
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