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    Post " Bleeding " A tribute to Trigun

    Bleeding:

    I'm bleeding from the inside,
    It's flowing like a river inside me,
    As my blood bleeds out of me you stare,
    This is my soul suffering inside,
    Can you see my pain?
    My fear?
    My blood?
    My sins?
    If I bleed, why not help me?
    You stand there staring,
    Help me please!
    Last edited by viper11025; Apr 05, 2006 at 07:50 PM. Reason: I had to fix this really badly.

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    Re: " Pain " A tribute to Trigun

    um is this poetry or spreading knowledge or something?

    I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.

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    Re: " Pain " A tribute to Trigun

    Thats my poetry in essence.
    My pain shall teach all.
    Learn from my mistakes.
    In my poetry.

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    Re: " Pain " A tribute to Trigun

    You wierd. That's nice. Read mine darling. Just try to use more expressive words though. You can call something painful. But how could you make me feel it? Describe it.

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    Re: " Pain " A tribute to Trigun

    I changed a few things but I have alot of other poetry I will work on better before I submit it.

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    Re: " Pain " A tribute to Trigun

    That sounds better. I like constructive criticm<----can't spell. So go into the poetry forum and tell me what you think of my poetry.

    I'm a glass child. I am Hannah's regrets. Monster.

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    Re: " Pain " A tribute to Trigun

    Your doing real well.
    Keep it up.

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