Pain of the world

*RayMe* · Aug 30, 2007, 07:21 AM

Pain of the world

When it rains,
feel the world's pain.
The skies are crying,
while you are hurting, tormenting and destroying it.

The thick black mists,
the colourful poison poists.
Killing the seas,
and the plants until not even peas are left.

I sook for sanctuaries,
but found mines and quaries instead.
Drilling deep into the soil,
until the earth is spoiled.

The ices in the artic withers away,
soon we will drown and pay.
It gets hotter everyday,
and all u can do is wait and lay down.

or...
You may start to be caring,
for the world is willing to give back.
Repair it! Mend it! Heal it!
Take it out from the sucking hellish pit.

We have the power to choose,
and we don't want to lose.
Do what is right,
though you must put in all your might.

Hear the voices of those who care.
Heed to it for they are aware.
Give them a hand,
and save this land.

Alucard_ML · Aug 30, 2007, 07:25 AM

Wow.... That a really really good poem Ray... It reminds me of this "Global Warm-up" (can't really remember what it's called) and what's happening to the earth, if it's true that is...

*equinn* · Aug 30, 2007, 07:29 AM

ooo kinda globle warming here ^^ awsome poem ray ^^

*RayMe* · Aug 30, 2007, 07:42 AM

Hmm having a hard time putting all the pollution into one...so i thought i make it simple

and put the one which is very common now... ^^ and a few others which might explain it whole.. xD

Thx alucard for reading ^^

and ty for saying it's awesome..my second rhyming poem~! xD

leftinthedark · Aug 30, 2007, 08:38 AM

wow this is a great poem i love reading all of your keep it up!

*RayMe* · Aug 30, 2007, 08:42 AM

I wonder if i did the rhyming right... :/ im still new with it @.@

thx ^^ i appreciate ur comments my friend ^^ and sure i will do so

blackrose92 · Aug 30, 2007, 11:42 AM

i love your ending to the poem^^

Hear the voices of those who care.
Heed to it for they are aware.
Give them a hand,
and save this land.

the whole poem was beautifully written^^

!Jamie5192 · Aug 30, 2007, 11:50 AM

It's a great poem and it speaks the truth... The world is falling apart around us and it's being torn apart right before our eyes and were the one's doing it. We sit here and say to recycle and things like that but because of our laziness we don't keep at it and we can see what it's doing to our world.. if we really don't want to let it die we would take better care of it....

*RayMe* · Aug 30, 2007, 11:54 AM

Lol u like that part rose?

cool

thx ^^

Hmmm yea.. :/ same with me.. XD but i did try to recycle when i could

*Lasura* · Aug 31, 2007, 03:18 AM

This was great, would you mind it if I put it as the first page in my enviromental management notes? I think this says everything anout that. This really makes me care even more and I hope it can convince other people too, that we have to take a look around and start to be more caring.

Nice work Ray, really nice work... And I see you've managed to make it rhyme nicely too, it was really nice to read this, I'm waiting forward for more!

*RayMe* · Aug 31, 2007, 04:11 AM

sure lasura ^^ u can use it..

really? it rhymed nicely? WHEE~!!

ty ^^

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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Pain of the world Pain of the world When it rains, feel the world's pain. The skies are crying, while you are hurting, tormenting and destroying it. The thick black mists, the colourful poison poists. Killing the seas, and the plants until not even peas are left. I sook for sanctuaries, but found mines and quaries instead. Drilling deep into the soil, until the earth is spoiled. The ices in the artic withers away, soon we will drown and pay. It gets hotter everyday, and all u can do is wait and lay down. or... You may start to be caring, for the world is willing to give back. Repair it! Mend it! Heal it! Take it out from the sucking hellish pit. We have the power to choose, and we don't want to lose. Do what is right, though you must put in all your might. Hear the voices of those who care. Heed to it for they are aware. Give them a hand, and save this land. __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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Alucard_ML Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Oct 2006 Location: Denmark Posts: 326 Thanks: 0 Thanked 3 Times in 3 Posts Credits: 2,210	Re: Pain of the world Wow.... That a really really good poem Ray... It reminds me of this "Global Warm-up" (can't really remember what it's called) and what's happening to the earth, if it's true that is... __________________ This awesome sig is made by Ryomakurosaki
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equinn Ao's official cat girl~★ Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Emerald island (Eire) (Ireland) Posts: 1,601 Thanks: 10 Thanked 19 Times in 19 Posts Credits: 16,042	Re: Pain of the world ooo kinda globle warming here ^^ awsome poem ray ^^ __________________
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: Pain of the world Hmm having a hard time putting all the pollution into one...so i thought i make it simple and put the one which is very common now... ^^ and a few others which might explain it whole.. xD Thx alucard for reading ^^ and ty for saying it's awesome..my second rhyming poem~! xD __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: Pain of the world I wonder if i did the rhyming right... :/ im still new with it @.@ thx ^^ i appreciate ur comments my friend ^^ and sure i will do so __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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blackrose92 Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Jul 2007 Location: washington state Posts: 149 Thanks: 7 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 2,248	Re: Pain of the world i love your ending to the poem^^ Hear the voices of those who care. Heed to it for they are aware. Give them a hand, and save this land. the whole poem was beautifully written^^ __________________ thank you so much zyta!!!^^ www.myspace.com/tallchocolatebeauty
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!Jamie5192 Banned Join Date: Apr 2007 Posts: 377 Thanks: 0 Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts Credits: -184	Re: Pain of the world It's a great poem and it speaks the truth... The world is falling apart around us and it's being torn apart right before our eyes and were the one's doing it. We sit here and say to recycle and things like that but because of our laziness we don't keep at it and we can see what it's doing to our world.. if we really don't want to let it die we would take better care of it....
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: Pain of the world Lol u like that part rose? cool thx ^^ Hmmm yea.. :/ same with me.. XD but i did try to recycle when i could __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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Lasura Angelic Join Date: Apr 2007 Location: In a Demon's Arms Posts: 1,866 Thanks: 56 Thanked 32 Times in 30 Posts Credits: 49,182	Re: Pain of the world This was great, would you mind it if I put it as the first page in my enviromental management notes? I think this says everything anout that. This really makes me care even more and I hope it can convince other people too, that we have to take a look around and start to be more caring. Nice work Ray, really nice work... And I see you've managed to make it rhyme nicely too, it was really nice to read this, I'm waiting forward for more! __________________ My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge
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RayMe 1 )3^^( )N Join Date: Jul 2006 Location: Somewhere i would love to leave right now for somewhere better... Posts: 3,601 Thanks: 54 Thanked 26 Times in 23 Posts Credits: 59,118	Re: Pain of the world sure lasura ^^ u can use it.. really? it rhymed nicely? WHEE~!! ty ^^ __________________ Legion Ketsueki Lives on~!! The best ever Lasura~! >>>myspace<<<
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