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    Pandoras' Box

    here is a poem i wrote a little while ago...yah. enjoy and please comment...i enjoy peoples' views on my poetry and whatnot ^.^

    Pandoras' Box

    I wait. secretly
    I smile. secretly
    I will devour you. secretly
    if you'll allow me...
    I laugh. indiscreetly
    I cry. maddeningly
    I ask why. honestly
    you've opened up something you shouldn't have
    what a foolish boy
    you should have never smiled at me
    should have never wrapped your arms around me
    I stand resolute
    I am most patient. secretly
    come to me then
    allow my lips to explore your flesh
    is it sweet?
    my lamb, I shall soon find out.

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    very awesome poem ,this poem drips with lust
    and and in the end that what most people want
    ,but it is never really satisfied you just want more
    . this is what i got from the poem anyway i loved it
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Very nice poem, Uten! It is unique - I haven't came across to read with this kind of style. You got a nice theme going on!! I believe this is the first poem I read of yours, so please post some more, and then, I can better judge your poems.

    Oh yeah, haven't seen you in a while at AO. Glad to see you post again. ^_^

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