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    Park yard Adventures

    Clockhands twirl,
    the wing slightly swirls.

    The day is bright and sunny,
    you've got stars in your eyes.

    Your voice is comforting,
    and the rain is shallow.

    We hit the grass, bodies embraced,
    happiness is no longer a dream.

    The ground is hard and a bit wet,
    but I don't care because I hold your face in my
    hands tonight.

    You're all I could never be,
    you make up for my flaws, my incompletes.

    The light blinding my face could never match your
    graceful ways. You're my everything.
    Dear Dinah...

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    Awww....It's so cute and romantic really! How much you really care for that person is so cute!!!!! I hope to see more!!!
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    Awwwwwwwwww! I love it. And the description I thought was great. And it soo ceuooot. lol
    I love it and hope to see more.

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    Aww..thankies ^-^ I feel so special. I will write more I promise andyes I do care for that person very very much.
    Dear Dinah...

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    OMG this is so bewautiful... Made me smile and... this love poem didn't make me feel lonely.. Now how did you do that?
    I really like this poem... it's short but has so many different thins in it- feelings, a story, love... beautiful!!! Gread work Kelly!

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    I don't know how I did it ^-^...but thank you so much. I am glad it gave off that effect. I will write more soon.
    Dear Dinah...

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    This poem rocks my socks! I like how you put so much emotion into it. The overall structure of this poem was great, and your word-play is something to be commended. If I were speaking to you in person, I'd have to shake your hand. Good job, mad props, and all that junk. ^_^


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    I am uber glad that everyone likes my poetry here. Everyone just seems to love it ^-^...I try my best so I guess it pays off
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