Part of me...

BrokenLover101 · Nov 25, 2007, 02:12 AM

Part of me…

Hey, how’s it going
Is what I would normally say
But I want to do something else
I want to express myself today

I want to tell you
That you are great
That you take my breath away
That you’re in my heart to stay

You make me smile
You make me laugh
I want you to be near me
Never to let your heart sway

I love you dearly
And I only hope that you can feel it
Each and every day
But now I wonder how you feel about me

arekandera · Nov 25, 2007, 02:53 AM

interesting poem BrokenLover101..the rhymes are pretty good and it has a nice message^^
nicely done

keep it up

ihauntforlust · Nov 25, 2007, 05:02 AM

Ah, Yes...One of my favourite poem writer....

I wonder......

Mhm.....Agreed...
Nicely done with the rhyming pattern, It swung beautifully....

Quote:

Originally Posted by BrokenLover101

Part of me…

You make me smile
You make me laugh
I want you to be near me
Never to let your heart sway

hmmmm......... =/ Those two lines bugged me out of the rest of the poem...I don't really know why, After I understood the meaning...they still bug me O.o'''''''' Maybe from my point of view...those lines didn't go well in that verse.... [remember; my point of view]

-x- Zainab -x-

Nov 25, 2007, 02:12 AM	#1 (permalink)
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arekandera Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Aug 2007 Posts: 102 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 4,014	Re: Part of me... interesting poem BrokenLover101..the rhymes are pretty good and it has a nice message^^ nicely done keep it up __________________
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