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  1. Nov 25, 2007 02:12 AM #1
    BrokenLover101
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    Part of me...

    Part of me…

    Hey, how’s it going
    Is what I would normally say
    But I want to do something else
    I want to express myself today

    I want to tell you
    That you are great
    That you take my breath away
    That you’re in my heart to stay

    You make me smile
    You make me laugh
    I want you to be near me
    Never to let your heart sway

    I love you dearly
    And I only hope that you can feel it
    Each and every day
    But now I wonder how you feel about me
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X
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    Re: Part of me...

    interesting poem BrokenLover101..the rhymes are pretty good and it has a nice message^^
    nicely done keep it up

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    Cool Re: Part of me...

    Ah, Yes...One of my favourite poem writer.... I wonder......

    Mhm.....Agreed...
    Nicely done with the rhyming pattern, It swung beautifully....

    Quote Originally Posted by BrokenLover101 View Post
    Part of me…

    You make me smile
    You make me laugh
    I want you to be near me
    Never to let your heart sway

    hmmmm......... =/ Those two lines bugged me out of the rest of the poem...I don't really know why, After I understood the meaning...they still bug me O.o'''''''' Maybe from my point of view...those lines didn't go well in that verse.... [remember; my point of view]


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