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Reply With QuoteIt started out great and the only thing that majorly sticks out is the last 2 lines because they don't go with the rest of it in my opinion...
You were never true
You didn't really love me
So I have to say bye
And walk away
You wouldn't care anyways
Because you loved another
So I have to say bye
And leave you forever
I won't cry
Or ever shed a tear
I'll leave you now
So goodbye.....
___________
yeah yeah it sucked but
I know that already.....
Last edited by Akura13; Aug 23, 2007 at 08:30 PM.
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It started out great and the only thing that majorly sticks out is the last 2 lines because they don't go with the rest of it in my opinion...
well you apperently is blind.the last stanza made PERFECT sense very good sis.i'll watch out for those "mean" persons. good description. keep it ↑Originally Posted by Jamie5192
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Yeah, Bye.
I'm going to actually agree with Jamie. The ending could have been a little better, and didn't include the repetition of 'So I have to say bye' line as the others did. Otherwise, it was a nice poem.
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Because they have obtained that level they are arrogant. You have to kep in mind when you talk about these guys they are kind of dorks who probably didn't excel at much and this is their only outlet to flex their muscles. Their egos would suffer no less so the the forum suffers some more. Watch one way or another they will probably repond to this post with a threat. But there are better forums out there. Private messege Zev.
sorry princess gotta agree with the majority..
yup they did not go along well.. i agree with that too... the poem was nice...but it could be nicer.. ^^
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well i dont know what the others are talking about lol i thought it was quite nice actually
I'm the best you'll ever have because i am that f*ing AMA-zing chic who can stand on her own d*n feet and becasue of you I am the Greatest
there happy now meanies? You didn't hafta insult my poem.....thank you theprincess it seems you're the only nice person here.....
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"Because it's okay to hide your tears." - LM.C (Lovely Mocochang)
You have to realize you aren't always going to get a positive reaction. Also, our points were meant to help you improve the poem so it might be better, it's not like any of us came out and told you it sucked just to make you feel bad. In fact, from what I read, we all said it was still nice. It just needs some improvements, in my opinion, which I'm entitled to have.
I look forward to the next poem.
Attitude of AO MODS, according to beast
Because they have obtained that level they are arrogant. You have to kep in mind when you talk about these guys they are kind of dorks who probably didn't excel at much and this is their only outlet to flex their muscles. Their egos would suffer no less so the the forum suffers some more. Watch one way or another they will probably repond to this post with a threat. But there are better forums out there. Private messege Zev.
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