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    Parting

    You were never true
    You didn't really love me
    So I have to say bye
    And walk away

    You wouldn't care anyways
    Because you loved another
    So I have to say bye
    And leave you forever

    I won't cry
    Or ever shed a tear
    I'll leave you now
    So goodbye.....
    ___________
    yeah yeah it sucked but
    I know that already.....
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    Re: Parting

    It started out great and the only thing that majorly sticks out is the last 2 lines because they don't go with the rest of it in my opinion...

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    Re: Parting

    Quote Originally Posted by Jamie5192 View Post
    It started out great and the only thing that majorly sticks out is the last 2 lines because they don't go with the rest of it in my opinion...
    well you apperently is blind.the last stanza made PERFECT sense very good sis.i'll watch out for those "mean" persons. good description. keep it ↑
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    Re: Parting

    I'm going to actually agree with Jamie. The ending could have been a little better, and didn't include the repetition of 'So I have to say bye' line as the others did. Otherwise, it was a nice poem.
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    Re: Parting

    sorry princess gotta agree with the majority..

    yup they did not go along well.. i agree with that too... the poem was nice...but it could be nicer.. ^^

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    well i dont know what the others are talking about lol i thought it was quite nice actually
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    Re: Parting

    there happy now meanies? You didn't hafta insult my poem.....thank you theprincess it seems you're the only nice person here.....



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    Re: Parting

    Quote Originally Posted by Akura13 View Post
    there happy now meanies? You didn't hafta insult my poem.....thank you theprincess it seems you're the only nice person here.....
    You have to realize you aren't always going to get a positive reaction. Also, our points were meant to help you improve the poem so it might be better, it's not like any of us came out and told you it sucked just to make you feel bad. In fact, from what I read, we all said it was still nice. It just needs some improvements, in my opinion, which I'm entitled to have.

    I look forward to the next poem.
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    Because they have obtained that level they are arrogant. You have to kep in mind when you talk about these guys they are kind of dorks who probably didn't excel at much and this is their only outlet to flex their muscles. Their egos would suffer no less so the the forum suffers some more. Watch one way or another they will probably repond to this post with a threat. But there are better forums out there. Private messege Zev.

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