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Old Aug 22, 2007, 09:57 PM   #1 (permalink)
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Parting

You were never true
You didn't really love me
So I have to say bye
And walk away

You wouldn't care anyways
Because you loved another
So I have to say bye
And leave you forever

I won't cry
Or ever shed a tear
I'll leave you now
So goodbye.....
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yeah yeah it sucked but
I know that already.....
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Old Aug 22, 2007, 10:01 PM   #2 (permalink)
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Re: Parting

It started out great and the only thing that majorly sticks out is the last 2 lines because they don't go with the rest of it in my opinion...
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Old Aug 23, 2007, 11:26 AM   #3 (permalink)
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It started out great and the only thing that majorly sticks out is the last 2 lines because they don't go with the rest of it in my opinion...
well you apperently is blind.the last stanza made PERFECT sense very good sis.i'll watch out for those "mean" persons. good description. keep it ↑
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Old Aug 23, 2007, 02:06 PM   #4 (permalink)
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I'm going to actually agree with Jamie. The ending could have been a little better, and didn't include the repetition of 'So I have to say bye' line as the others did. Otherwise, it was a nice poem.
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Old Aug 23, 2007, 02:18 PM   #5 (permalink)
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sorry princess gotta agree with the majority..

yup they did not go along well.. i agree with that too... the poem was nice...but it could be nicer.. ^^
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well i dont know what the others are talking about lol i thought it was quite nice actually
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Old Aug 23, 2007, 09:34 PM   #7 (permalink)
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there happy now meanies? You didn't hafta insult my poem.....thank you theprincess it seems you're the only nice person here.....
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there happy now meanies? You didn't hafta insult my poem.....thank you theprincess it seems you're the only nice person here.....
You have to realize you aren't always going to get a positive reaction. Also, our points were meant to help you improve the poem so it might be better, it's not like any of us came out and told you it sucked just to make you feel bad. In fact, from what I read, we all said it was still nice. It just needs some improvements, in my opinion, which I'm entitled to have.

I look forward to the next poem.
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Old Aug 23, 2007, 10:08 PM   #9 (permalink)
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then how come on another poem a guy critisized it and got banned huh?????
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Well i thought it was nice. Its a pretty good breakup poem and it reminded me of something a friend of mine wrote to this guy, but anyways it was good.^^
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