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    A Past, Your Future

    The past holds great despair
    Hearts broken
    Lives lost
    Lies told
    Betrayal

    Many hurtful things have been done
    Each one
    Another link to the chain holding you back
    You struggle
    Fighting to break away

    Yet you say that you can't go on
    Nothing else to live for
    You just stay as you are
    Crying
    Feeling great depression from what has happened

    Lift you head
    Break away from the past
    You can go on
    Free yourself from your chains
    Let go your emotions of your dark past

    It is how we move on
    This is how we get to the future's light
    We have to let go of our past
    So we are able to grasp the greater good

    Believe in yourself
    The past is then
    The future is now
    This is your life, your way of living
    Don't let anything hold you back
    The future holds great opportunities
    Just make it happen

    Writer's Notes: Eh, I could've done better. I've got really nothing to say other than that. Thanks for reading.

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    Re: A Past, Your Future

    Heh... you "could've done better"? Well, thats true for everyone on every subject. But I was quite satisfied with this... It seemed to be one of those things I needed to hear. Something that spoke so specifically to things that have been burdening me. Its great when art can touch people like this did for me. Thank you so much for sharing this
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    Re: A Past, Your Future

    This is actually better than the most I've seen. The story telling it has is wonderful.

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    This poem was written well and don't be modest... It's wonderful because you describe how you can and usually will when you finally let the past go and you live in the future.^^ Keep up the great work!!!

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    Re: A Past, Your Future

    I'm glad you all liked it. I said I could've done better because it seemed to me like it didn't have something that I wanted it to have. But I guess that really depends on the readers. Thank you for your words. =)

    Edit note: Though this poem kinda seems like it's the end of sad poems for me, (Not sure if I wrote any...) it's not. I will probably write some sad poems one of these days.
    Last edited by Chaos105; Aug 25, 2007 at 05:32 PM.

    They say, "I will die for my country." I never hear them say, "I will kill for my country."

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    Re: A Past, Your Future

    nice of you to say that I must say ^^ it's really encouraging... This really is something I'd show to a person who has lost believe in himself because of his/her past...
    Ok, there's actually nothing more to say here. Nice work ^^

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