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    The Path Down

    The Path Down

    Eyes meet
    lips lock
    the path down readies.

    Hands caress
    breathing accelerates
    the path down begins.

    Fingers fumble
    clothing releases
    the path down halts.

    Arms embrace
    skin glistens
    the path down continues.

    Kisses ensue
    neck chest breast
    the path down concentrates.

    Fingers slide
    on beautiful skin
    the path down taunts.

    Stomach and naval
    tongue tip tastes
    the path down shortens.

    Hair tickles
    smell and sight excite
    the path down jubilates.

    A sweet kiss
    upon Eden
    the path down rests.

    Mouth struggle and push
    pleasure moans
    the path down struggles

    The paths purpose
    a sweet taste of
    Ambrosia.


    Well there that is, let’s see if any one thinks I have a sliver of talent for poetry.
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    Re: The Path Down

    Wow, you definitely have a way with words. It gives you nice..hum...imagery. Keep up, the good work. You silver tongued devil!
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    Re: The Path Down

    OMG! Very good poem Mech I like how my imagination runs wild with it. It is very well writen keep up with the good work. I can't wait to read more of your poems.

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    Re: The Path Down

    you used very descriptive words in your poem which made it very.. interesting to read ^^ keep up the good work =]
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    Re: The Path Down

    DAMN!......
    Oh my... that was just.... wow.

    well, I had to take a minute for my temp to go down and my heart rate to slow... and now my speach can return enough to say:

    That poem was hot! Well written, and very...um... effective. lol
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    Re: The Path Down

    my... that give me darn good images.. nice way with words...good description.. though it is little effective like peachy said...

    That give me them some good ol memories... *sighs*~ *looks around*.. why u guys looking at me like that? ^^

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    Re: The Path Down

    Thanks, I think I like Peach_follows reply the best though. ^__^

    I thought I would tread the waters of a more "adult" poem. The toughest part about writing it was I wanted to be a little less, hmmmm "artful" with my descriptions.

    I may have some more of this type in me, maybe I'll get a following for these. ( yeah right )
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    Re: The Path Down

    Give me a second here... Woo... another moment please, I have to compose myself!
    Wow... Very descriptive, and very nice flow! Man anyone out there who says they didn't have a wild ride there is either lying or inexperienced!
    I think I may have blushed a bit there, my friend here was (still is) looking funny at me and smirking. He came over for me to do some updates for him on his computer, and he stayed. Naturally he wanted to know what I was looking at, I told him to mind his own screen, of course he butts in and reads the poem. Guess I'll hear about this at work for at least a couple of weeks. But it was worth it. I liked your poem very much, nice job.

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