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    Perfect...

    Perfect

    After all the pain
    The lies that you’ve told
    And being hurt by the things you’ve done
    I still love you

    Your still the one I think about
    The one I can’t live without
    I’ll always think of you as perfect
    Even though you think other wise

    You’re the only guy who makes me wonder
    What this feeling is inside
    The warming, churning and gentle nature
    Everything good in me, you bring out

    There is only one reason I stay alive
    One reason I get up every morning
    The reason I don’t commit suicide
    The reason is you…

    My heart beats for you
    For the love we share
    You’re the one I want
    The one I cry for

    My angel from above
    The one who is always there
    Who gets me through everything
    My love, my life, my everything…

    I love you and want to talk
    To trust and care for you
    I want us to be one of those perfect couples
    Where the love never runs out
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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    Re: Perfect...

    This poem is very touching and the words give it depth, meaning and they are full of emotions......
    Great job!!!!!!
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    Re: Perfect...

    That is really nice. I have read four poems before yours, but left no comments. Yours is really nice. Somehow those words just don't seem quite right. I don't know what it is about your poem that makes me like it so much. Perhaps that is the perfect comment...

    I do not know what it is about your poem, but something about your poem stirred something in me. I had to say something to you. To let you know not just that you did a good job with it, but that your words made me feel something.

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    Re: Perfect...

    Quote Originally Posted by Umbriel View Post
    That is really nice. I have read four poems before yours, but left no comments. Yours is really nice. Somehow those words just don't seem quite right. I don't know what it is about your poem that makes me like it so much. Perhaps that is the perfect comment...

    I do not know what it is about your poem, but something about your poem stirred something in me. I had to say something to you. To let you know not just that you did a good job with it, but that your words made me feel something.

    Thanks you guys, i'm glad you liked it.

    Well the only question i have for you is.. is it a good stirring or a bad stirring? I'm truly glad you liked it Umbriel. Some say that these types of poems come from being with someone, having someone to love and having them love you back... but you know... they don't. They come from your heart and soul. You can be alone and miserable and still make beautiful poems that others enjoy. It's my wish... my dream.. to be in love with someone and be that couple that sticks through everything together, be that couple that everyone looks at and goes "i wish i had a love like theirs." No matter what people say, anyone can have that love and never think you can't.

    Anyway....... I'm glad you liked it and hope to hear more from you.
    X.x.X The only thing I'll ever want... X.x.X

    X.x.X Is for you to love me the way I love you.. X.x.X

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    Borkenlover, that was really good, however the flow flow was just a little off, however despite that your poems are all really good and I like them, keep up the poetry and I will keep an eye out for them. I always enjoy reading your poems. Keep it up
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    Re: Perfect...

    Quote Originally Posted by BrokenLover101 View Post

    Thanks you guys, i'm glad you liked it.

    Well the only question i have for you is.. is it a good stirring or a bad stirring? I'm truly glad you liked it Umbriel. Some say that these types of poems come from being with someone, having someone to love and having them love you back... but you know... they don't. They come from your heart and soul. You can be alone and miserable and still make beautiful poems that others enjoy. It's my wish... my dream.. to be in love with someone and be that couple that sticks through everything together, be that couple that everyone looks at and goes "i wish i had a love like theirs." No matter what people say, anyone can have that love and never think you can't.

    Anyway....... I'm glad you liked it and hope to hear more from you.

    Oh, it was all good feelings, in a way. Is it possible to have good feelings of bad feelings (sadness, loneliness, etc.)?

    You just felt it. The longing, the loneliness, the loss, the emotion. It's there for everyone to see... to feel. It made me wish I had that love as well.

    I take care of my Mother and sister who have health problems, and I have no real social (one on one I mean) life to speak of. I tell myself, I'm okay with that, but sometimes I feel the loneliness. Your poem touched that empty place we all have somewhere inside us. It was only little more than a flutter, but it was there.

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