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    Perfect Day

    Foamy sea water crashing into rocks
    Shiny seaweed lingers on it tops

    Cool fresh breezes
    run through my face
    Soaring seagulls flying
    with such grace

    Clear blue skys , a sun shining bright
    Signals a perfect day
    Watching such beauty out by the bay

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    hehe I know it might of sounded silly, but I like my cute silly little poem
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    Re: Perfect Day

    I think this is charming and somewhat elegant in its brevity. Nothing wrong with staying short. A lot of people want to keep adding lines when they have a perfectly good poem and ruin it. This is good.

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