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    Perishing One

    Eternal darkness without a limit,
    No soul can withstand the pain in it
    Struggling to find the will to fight,
    It's hard without a single ray of light
    Running aimlessly in the cold,soft sand
    Somewhere nearby a river crosses the land
    I am lost,my life is done,
    It seems that I must be the Perishing One.

    A poem,I wrote a long ago
    Hope y'all like it

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    Re: Perishing One

    Like it, I love it. You made a point but you didn't get obnoxious. This is a great poem with a rhyme scheme and everything. You killed and leaved. You may want to check out the Poem Of The Month Competition. http://www.animeonline.net/f117/

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    Re: Perishing One

    Thank you very much beast
    Will post others aswell,I have many,I like to write,altough I'm not that good at it
    But I'm trying to get better and better
    Thanks again

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    Re: Perishing One

    Quote Originally Posted by IllussionSK View Post
    ,I like to write,altough I'm not that good at it
    But I'm trying to get better and better
    Thanks again
    Good is a matter of opinion and I think you are. In your introduction you entitled it IllusionSK has arrived. I say IllussionSK has arrived and kicks ass.

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    Re: Perishing One

    Thanks so much
    It means a lot that people like what I write.I'm gonna try my best.

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    Re: Perishing One

    Quote Originally Posted by beast View Post
    Good is a matter of opinion and I think you are. In your introduction you entitled it IllusionSK has arrived. I say IllussionSK has arrived and kicks ass.
    I agree very good!!! How long have you been writing?
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    Re: Perishing One

    Well,not that long,when I have some inspiration,I write down what I think or feel
    First,I just wrote down my thoughts,then I tried to add some rhymes to it.I will post more of my poems,so you can see what I get when I write something:P

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    Re: Perishing One

    Well, if you need assistance with a poem ask me or beast or any other Poet of whom posts in this section. I'm sure any one of them would be glad to assist as long as they receive proper credit in your poem.

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