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    phoney

    they all laugh at him
    as he sits and cries
    for which him and his
    feelings they all dispise

    but theirs his one friend
    who he suspects only lies
    and he doesnt believe him
    when he says theyll stay friends till he dies

    hes bringing himself back
    togethers wiping away his tears
    and all the depressing thoughts
    in his mind he clears

    every one is gone now
    now he is very lonely
    he hears his freind talking
    and realizes hes a phoney

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    Re: phoney

    Wow. This brought back many very painful memories for me. I remeber when I felt like no one loved or cared about me. And everyone I thought to be my "friends" had just left me in the cold. Just so they could mingle with others who hurt me.
    Well , before I start to cry I better just sum this up. You did a great job putting true feelings into this.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: phoney

    Pfft, it got kinda confusing for me but I still ending up liking it.

    The titles (or who makes the thing) are what draw me in. Your title stabbed me in the eye with a Sharpie when I wasn't looking.

    Love where this went, you actually managed to close it with 'style.' Use proper grammar though, many people will blab at you about it. Overall you did wonderfully.

    (for which him and his, that line made me der)
    the love you withhold is the pain you carry.

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    Re: phoney

    thanks people for the comments and peach-follows your story thing is like exactly what happened (happens) to me.

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