Pigtaru Poetry, #2.

Titled: inside

Empty hollow shadows fall,
ensnared by metals, pricked by thorns,
tears are welcomed, holes are worn,
trapped between solid walls,

Foul and wretched, ammonia stenched,
bare and nake, wearing death's scent,
bleeding heart, drowned in agony,
weeping soul, lynching memories.

Lost is the mind, blue not red
numbing the feelings, stagnant dead
what once was prismatic, shines no more
only morbid and gloomy, the conscious adores


Hope you guys like it, my second poem, i'm going to bed.
NIGHT!

EDIT: I was told recently that Mods have issued a rule saying "NO CHATS in poems", just so you guys know...:)
~pigtaru:2thumbs:

haha... wat a way to flaunt ur extensive vocab, LOL. uhhh.... I'll get bck 2 u when I can interpret ur poetry 2 the best of my ability. ^_^

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mmm... this poem reminds me of a novel I read last yr - "Briar Rose" : Based on the holocaust.
It creates an atmopshere of entrapment and .... uh suffering. (obviously, LOL). But I guess u could relate it to the suffering of even any average human-being.

Well thats my interpretation at least. haha, only Piggy would know, right? ^_^

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Originally Posted by cerebrum

Well thats my interpretation at least. haha, only Piggy would know, right? ^_^

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haha, such a great interpretation cere, your mind works much similar to mine, except i'm not as cynical, haha. I'll leave the interpretation of this poem to the readers, but it is suppose to draw from the darker emotion/feelings

wow, major vocab pigtaru-san. ouch. Hey, u know what too, i think that wound sound nice if you put music to it. i got a lil melody in me head from that.

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Originally Posted by XxStormySkyexX

wow, major vocab pigtaru-san. ouch. Hey, u know what too, i think that wound sound nice if you put music to it. i got a lil melody in me head from that.

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LOL, i was listening to some rap during my writing, haha, maybe that's why...? haha

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Originally Posted by pigtaru

LOL, i was listening to some rap during my writing, haha, maybe that's why...? haha

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Yeah, that could be why lmao. but its a wonderful poem too. keep it up!

Hmm...thats a good one. I like it.

Like i will say forever and ever amen! You rock! I love how everything had a meaning and nothing was left undefined. Like if shadows had shadows almost. Things hard to describe. And you made into something very meaningful!