Pigtaru Poetry, #2.

*pigtaru* · May 09, 2006, 01:49 AM

Titled: inside

Empty hollow shadows fall,
ensnared by metals, pricked by thorns,
tears are welcomed, holes are worn,
trapped between solid walls,

Foul and wretched, ammonia stenched,
bare and nake, wearing death's scent,
bleeding heart, drowned in agony,
weeping soul, lynching memories.

Lost is the mind, blue not red
numbing the feelings, stagnant dead
what once was prismatic, shines no more
only morbid and gloomy, the conscious adores

Hope you guys like it, my second poem, i'm going to bed.
NIGHT!

EDIT: I was told recently that Mods have issued a rule saying "NO CHATS in poems", just so you guys know...

~pigtaru

cerebrum · May 09, 2006, 03:05 AM

haha... wat a way to flaunt ur extensive vocab, LOL. uhhh.... I'll get bck 2 u when I can interpret ur poetry 2 the best of my ability. ^_^

Edit :
mmm... this poem reminds me of a novel I read last yr - "Briar Rose" : Based on the holocaust.
It creates an atmopshere of entrapment and .... uh suffering. (obviously, LOL). But I guess u could relate it to the suffering of even any average human-being.

Well thats my interpretation at least. haha, only Piggy would know, right? ^_^

*pigtaru* · May 09, 2006, 09:21 AM

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Originally Posted by cerebrum

Well thats my interpretation at least. haha, only Piggy would know, right? ^_^

haha, such a great interpretation cere, your mind works much similar to mine, except i'm not as cynical, haha. I'll leave the interpretation of this poem to the readers, but it is suppose to draw from the darker emotion/feelings

XxStormySkyexX · May 09, 2006, 09:23 AM

wow, major vocab pigtaru-san. ouch. Hey, u know what too, i think that wound sound nice if you put music to it. i got a lil melody in me head from that.

*pigtaru* · May 09, 2006, 09:31 AM

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Originally Posted by XxStormySkyexX

wow, major vocab pigtaru-san. ouch. Hey, u know what too, i think that wound sound nice if you put music to it. i got a lil melody in me head from that.

LOL, i was listening to some rap during my writing, haha, maybe that's why...? haha

XxStormySkyexX · May 09, 2006, 09:37 AM

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Originally Posted by pigtaru

LOL, i was listening to some rap during my writing, haha, maybe that's why...? haha

Yeah, that could be why lmao. but its a wonderful poem too. keep it up!

Shinku no kage · May 09, 2006, 11:26 AM

Hmm...thats a good one. I like it.

Nympho · May 10, 2006, 02:50 PM

Like i will say forever and ever amen! You rock! I love how everything had a meaning and nothing was left undefined. Like if shadows had shadows almost. Things hard to describe. And you made into something very meaningful!

*Hold.Me.X.Thrill.Me* · May 10, 2006, 02:59 PM

That is great Piggy! Kinda serious for you though :P

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Foul and wretched, ammonia stenched,
bare and nake, wearing death's scent,

When you put nake, it made think of this as more sophisticated XD

Quote:

Lost is the mind, blue not red
numbing the feelings, stagnant dead

I like how you put it as blue numbing the feelings, it was as though saddness is numbing it, in my opinion :P

atashi · May 10, 2006, 05:52 PM

*claps*

That was really good keep it up.

*Exoparadapsyphobia* · May 10, 2006, 06:08 PM

I'm not a huge fan of poetry, but that was really good. Keep up the good work Pigtaru

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May 09, 2006, 01:49 AM	#1 (permalink)
pigtaru Otaku Join Date: Apr 2005 Location: Elk Grove, CA USA Posts: 400 Thanks: 0 Thanked 2 Times in 2 Posts Credits: 534	Pigtaru Poetry, #2. Titled: inside Empty hollow shadows fall, ensnared by metals, pricked by thorns, tears are welcomed, holes are worn, trapped between solid walls, Foul and wretched, ammonia stenched, bare and nake, wearing death's scent, bleeding heart, drowned in agony, weeping soul, lynching memories. Lost is the mind, blue not red numbing the feelings, stagnant dead what once was prismatic, shines no more only morbid and gloomy, the conscious adores Hope you guys like it, my second poem, i'm going to bed. NIGHT! EDIT: I was told recently that Mods have issued a rule saying "NO CHATS in poems", just so you guys know... ~pigtaru __________________ o~Piggy-san~o Last edited by pigtaru; May 09, 2006 at 11:18 AM.
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cerebrum Diamond in the Rough Join Date: Mar 2006 Location: Some part of the universe. Posts: 295 Thanks: 0 Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post Credits: 949	Re: Pigtaru Poetry, #2. haha... wat a way to flaunt ur extensive vocab, LOL. uhhh.... I'll get bck 2 u when I can interpret ur poetry 2 the best of my ability. ^_^ Edit : mmm... this poem reminds me of a novel I read last yr - "Briar Rose" : Based on the holocaust. It creates an atmopshere of entrapment and .... uh suffering. (obviously, LOL). But I guess u could relate it to the suffering of even any average human-being. Well thats my interpretation at least. haha, only Piggy would know, right? ^_^ __________________ Sig courtesy goes to : Sazuka. [Sig team] Last edited by cerebrum; May 09, 2006 at 05:37 AM.
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