Titled: inside
Empty hollow shadows fall,
ensnared by metals, pricked by thorns,
tears are welcomed, holes are worn,
trapped between solid walls,
Foul and wretched, ammonia stenched,
bare and nake, wearing death's scent,
bleeding heart, drowned in agony,
weeping soul, lynching memories.
Lost is the mind, blue not red
numbing the feelings, stagnant dead
what once was prismatic, shines no more
only morbid and gloomy, the conscious adores
Hope you guys like it, my second poem, i'm going to bed.
NIGHT!
EDIT: I was told recently that Mods have issued a rule saying "NO CHATS in poems", just so you guys know...
~pigtaru
Last edited by pigtaru; May 09, 2006 at 10:18 AM.
haha... wat a way to flaunt ur extensive vocab, LOL. uhhh.... I'll get bck 2 u when I can interpret ur poetry 2 the best of my ability. ^_^
Edit :
mmm... this poem reminds me of a novel I read last yr - "Briar Rose" : Based on the holocaust.
It creates an atmopshere of entrapment and .... uh suffering. (obviously, LOL). But I guess u could relate it to the suffering of even any average human-being.
Well thats my interpretation at least. haha, only Piggy would know, right? ^_^
Last edited by cerebrum; May 09, 2006 at 04:37 AM.
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haha, such a great interpretation cere, your mind works much similar to mine, except i'm not as cynical, haha. I'll leave the interpretation of this poem to the readers, but it is suppose to draw from the darker emotion/feelingsOriginally Posted by cerebrum
wow, major vocab pigtaru-san. ouch. Hey, u know what too, i think that wound sound nice if you put music to it. i got a lil melody in me head from that.
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LOL, i was listening to some rap during my writing, haha, maybe that's why...? haha
Yeah, that could be why lmao. but its a wonderful poem too. keep it up!
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Hmm...thats a good one. I like it.
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