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    Please Don't ...

    Don't Say You're Sorry If You're Really Not
    Don't Say You'll Give It All You've Got.
    Don't Say You Love Me If You Don't Even Care.
    Don't Say You Will Be If You're Never There
    Don't Say You Want Me If Its Just A Lie.

    Don't Break My Heart, Cause You'll Only Make Me Cry.
    Don't Kiss Me Gently If You're Just Gonna Leave
    Don't Tell Me To Have Faith, If You Don't Believe
    Don't Say You Love Me, Then Turn And Walk Away.
    Don't Say You Wanna Be With Me Unless It's Everyday.

    Don't Make A Promise You Don't Intend To Keep.
    Like The One You Made To Me, The One That Made Me Weep.
    Don't Tell Me You'll Always Be There If You're Just Gonna Leave
    Don't Tell Me I'm The Center Of The Web That You Weave.
    Don't Say I Am Your Whole Wide World If You Just Wanna Make Me Cry

    And Don't Say You Love Me Completely If Its Just A Lie.
    Don't You Dare Confess Your Love When I Know You've Been With Her
    And Don't Pretend To Tell The Truth..cause To You, The Truth's A Blur.
    But Most Of All, Above All This, Don't Say You Love Me Too.
    Cause When I Say I Love You, U Gotta Know Its True.

    Don't Say Your Lost Without My Touch, That You'll Die Without My Kiss
    Don't Say That When You're Holding Me, All You Need Is This.
    Don't Kiss My Lips, And Hold My Hand, If You're Planning To Just Let Go,
    Don't Let Me Ask You If You Love Me, If You Know The Answer's No.
    Don't Ever, Ever Touch My Life The Way You Always Do,

    Because You Know Without A Doubt,
    That I'm Nothing Without You.

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    Re: Please Don't ...

    Very difficult to read because of the capital letters!

    Your really great with the rhyming! ^^

    The way you used repition made it all the more effective!

    I like this verse!:
    Don't Break My Heart, Cause You'll Only Make Me Cry.
    Don't Kiss Me Gently If You're Just Gonna Leave
    Don't Tell Me To Have Faith, If You Don't Believe
    Don't Say You Love Me, Then Turn And Walk Away.
    Don't Say You Wanna Be With Me Unless It's Everyday.
    Especially the last line, it really caught my eye!

    I'm really starting to like your poems Othello!! Keep writing! XD

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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    Re: Please Don't ...

    mmmm lot of dont say there........a lil annoying since it's in a long poem...i would rather suggest u repeat the last line at the end of each stanza but either than tht it's good

    Thanks for the siggy Ky-lyrra

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    Re: Please Don't ...

    It was a nice try.
    Keep on working at it you will get it.

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    Re: Please Don't ...

    it's think it was good but kinda long...

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    Re: Please Don't ...

    The pome was nice, but as holdme said it is really hard to read it with all those capital letters.

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    Re: Please Don't ...

    Oh wow guy that was really touching. only if i could get my boyfriend to say the words I love you.... But wow .... 4 reall!!!!!

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    Re: Please Don't ...

    The ryhming is what I like most about this poem. You could space it out abit but thats about all. Keep it up your ryhming can realy make a poem!

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