A poem by...

*Abu Dhabi* · Jun 01, 2006, 05:38 PM

My heart
feels ripped out;

like it's laying before me

.alone.

why...

why is it still beating
when there is no blood left;

see

it's there

... still beating.

Still beating though it hath no life.

i'm afraid to pick it

up

... so fragile; this little heart
that beats with no blood

outside

the body...

Your gentle hands
look like claws

but can pick things up;
so tenderly...

please, when you've picked

me

up...

don't

go...

i...

.you.

are my

light

blood

life.

^_^ hee hee! you like? i hope so...

Red_Wings · Jun 01, 2006, 05:42 PM

Aw!! I love it. I imagine a really hot, tough guy being really gentle! You're so good!! Write more!!

*Soshi Kitai* · Jun 01, 2006, 05:50 PM

; _ ;

...............did I do something wrong???

*Abu Dhabi* · Jun 01, 2006, 05:55 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Red_Wings

I imagine a really hot, tough guy being really gentle!

Well, that's pretty much Soshi in a nutshell! thanks for the compliment!

And Darling... where was my heart when i met you? where was my blood? where was my life? ... it was only in my body when your GENTLE hands that LOOK LIKE claws picked it up for me... ^_^

DEMON SPAWN · Jun 01, 2006, 10:28 PM

*looks at the screen speechless*

atashi · Jun 02, 2006, 01:09 AM

wow that was good, but a little bit scary 2.

*ketaro* · Jun 02, 2006, 03:59 AM

kool poem, it was really nice and neat. keep it up.

*Soshi Kitai* · Jun 02, 2006, 05:00 PM

Quote:

Originally Posted by Abu Dhabi

And Darling... where was my heart when i met you? where was my blood? where was my life? ... it was only in my body when your GENTLE hands that LOOK LIKE claws picked it up for me... ^_^

-.- Your heart was with a giant albino woman who had hair long enough to be considered a demon... and used for having useless crushes on men who had no personality at all.

-_- Hmph. That's where you were before you met me.

...

^u^ Heehee, jes teasin' hun... ..... well, not really, those guys were pretty useless, and that girl was a demon. XD A really mono-toned demon.

>_> Pf, I could've taken any of those men out! .... well, maybe not Josue (did I spell his name right? ) ... friggin' capoeira b@stard.......

... ^u^ (just goes to show you that all foreigners that go to that school kick @$$.... XD)

^_^ But I do like the poem... I love it...
You sooo sweet my lil' hun-bun! ^U^ *cuddles*

*Abu Dhabi* · Jun 02, 2006, 05:35 PM

^_^ i'm glad you like it!

... but... is it really that scary, everyone?

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Abu Dhabi Spoken for. Join Date: Oct 2005 Location: near Taco Bell Posts: 1,519 Thanks: 21 Thanked 17 Times in 14 Posts Credits: 7,650	A poem by... My heart feels ripped out; like it's laying before me .alone. why... why is it still beating when there is no blood left; see it's there ... still beating. Still beating though it hath no life. i'm afraid to pick it up ... so fragile; this little heart that beats with no blood outside the body... Your gentle hands look like claws but can pick things up; so tenderly... please, when you've picked me up... don't go... i... .you. are my light blood life. ^_^ hee hee! you like? i hope so... __________________ great day! . . .
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