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    poem

    Tears of bloodflow....
    Pain...
    Let me go...

    I need not be like this,
    like my pain of old.

    I'm dying by old wounds unmeanded,
    and the pain has never ended.

    No wonder all are confused by me,
    cause my old pain they cannot see.

    Tears... stop flowing,
    so I don't die.

    I hate myself for who I've become...
    Now I have the one...
    but I'm so cold inside,
    that I feel i'll be the one to make her die.

    My fear....
    that i inadvertantly hurt her.
    That the bloodflow tears,
    will be her final rest making wound.

    Now... i try to not hurt you,
    but my own pain tries.

    Comfort me please,
    everytime my bloodflow tears,
    try to harm you,
    so that they won't flow.

    Please....
    my love.....
    don't let me go.......



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    Re: poem

    This was a very nice poem. I can relate to your feelings. I thought the stanzas were done nicely, with the emotion.
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    Re: poem

    Bloodflow tears? Not understanding. But you always had a way with words.
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    Re: poem

    *sniffles* omgz..i can relate to u..i think, based from ur poem we're pretty much the same..

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    Re: poem

    wow that was deep i really can relate, btw b4 i get emotional, that was awesome keep it up.
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    Re: poem

    wow that poem is great anda deep i can totally relate i love this poem"10"
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    Re: poem

    An yet again the same damn post, if your not going to give critique dont post.

    ONCE MORE!
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    Re: poem

    there is a deeper emotion behind this poem and I can't quite place my finger on it! But the use of word in this poem is very well thought out and you have a very unique style! Nice Job!

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