Thread: A poem

Creative~!! This is very good @.@ oh god... i love poems like this too bad im not that creative to make 1... *rofl*

Nicely done.. the rhymes and the way the poem goes is very good I like it very much I hope you will write more though.. the poem section could use some1 of your calibre..

Pretty please?

last word... is.. Damn enjoyable.. keep up the good work...i hope... because you said you aint writing no more.. *sighs*

Originally Posted by Legend

PAYCHECK!!!

OMFG! That was fantastic. I didn't get it at first! Then, I saw PAYCHECK! That is good . . . . I thought for half a second you were talking to a woman, then a hooker, then your paycheck! It all makes sence now!

Originally Posted by divine_punishment

OMFG! That was fantastic. I didn't get it at first! Then, I saw PAYCHECK! That is good . . . . I thought for half a second you were talking to a woman, then a hooker, then your paycheck! It all makes sence now!

Hooker?? How did you come to that conclusion?? lol Wouldn't in that case make my pockets and stomach more empty instead of the other way around?? I will probably be throwing up and having to pay her. I was contemplating on whether to write the word out, but I was afraid of misinterpretation so I guess it did come in handy by writing out paycheck.

It was so painful sitting here, trying to go through your poem. I saw no pattern, no style, no anything.

?

Were you writing this just for the sake of typing?
because that is honestly what I got

Nonono,
please.

Rewrite this.
With more depth.
With more thought.
With more meaning.

Oh wow.
Wow Michael.

Originally Posted by RayMe

Nicely done.. the rhymes and the way the poem goes is very good I like it very much I hope you will write more though.. the poem section could use some1 of your calibre..

Originally Posted by The White Wolf

It was so painful sitting here, trying to go through your poem. I saw no pattern, no style, no anything.

Were you writing this just for the sake of typing?
because that is honestly what I got

Yeah probably. Or maybe it's a symbolism of some stuff we as staff have to go through everyday? Nah, I'm shitting ya it's a crappy poem.

Originally Posted by The White Wolf

Nonono,
please.

Rewrite this.
With more depth.
With more thought.
With more meaning.

Eh don't count on it. It has already served the two purpose I want, giving RayMe the "poem" I promised him (by the way props for your month of fasting), and to have a little humor for everybody to laugh at. Don't get so serious about it wolfey.

ooo v coolies poem i have never read one from you before and its a surprise u dont write more ....

and this poem gets 10/10 i really liked it ^^

Originally Posted by Legend

Yeah probably. Or maybe it's a symbolism of some stuff we as staff have to go through everyday? Nah, I'm shitting ya it's a crappy poem.



Eh don't count on it. It has already served the two purpose I want, giving RayMe the "poem" I promised him (by the way props for your month of fasting), and to have a little humor for everybody to laugh at. Don't get so serious about it wolfey.

Your poem has acquired five stars.

What has the world come to?

Ah, I miss you man. Yeh, I take things too seriously at times. Sorry. I was just browsing the poetry section and came across some very well written poems and then I come across yours and wow.

It was like a slap in the face.