Thread: Poem 4 of 7

I loved the first and second verse of the first stanza. In fact, after reading those two? I quickly lost interest. I think it's the way you conveyed revenge.. It left me hoping for a way that you go back on your find. And instead find forgiveness.

I'm not saying that I want you to chnage the emotion of the poem to fit my opinion. I'm not saying you should change it all. Well, I am a little bit. Lol. I'd suggest using those pretty words I speak of so fondly? Make me FEEL what the character is feeling. Words have power. And let me tell you, you have a way with your writing. You just have to make me FEEL the words. Not just read them and understand the meaning.

i liked it but it was about me any way so i understand it better