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    poem for my blossom

    "Fate is against us..."
    as you say,
    while we sit some,
    thousands of moments away.
    You want different things from me,
    but in the end,
    they are same as my desires.
    you want someone who doesn't,
    treat you badly or use you.
    I want to take care of someone,
    and be the strength for them,
    and love them like them need the love.
    I'm so close to you,
    yet so far away.
    so close to the love i desire,
    yet so far from being able to hold it.
    so close to every hug,
    and every kiss i ever could have needed....
    yet I'm unable to see you,
    thanks to the "ties that bind our souls",
    the "threads of fate" that keep us apart,
    while our "normal lives" are as normal,
    as a living vampire among us.
    our feelings are not such a fantasy,
    but what keeps us apart seems to be so.
    i pray that if this is a dream,
    that the nightmare ends,
    so that i can wake up beside you,
    and know that my "life" is over.
    I'll trade all that i own now,
    just for the falsehood of happiness,
    if being with you is so,
    then let me never ever wake.
    let me dream away forever.
    let me dream away,
    ....with you....


    -Justin-

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    I definitely like what I'm reading. The poem itself is quite amazing. It's a work of art. It kind of reminds of a story that has dramatic irony like Romeo and Juliet. Feuding families forcing lovers never to be close. Fated never to be together. It's really sad, but just like Romeo and Juliet, this poem conveys a lot about having supressed feelings of love in public. Only in secret the two lovers can show their true feelings. The last part that talks about "dreaming forever" was that a euphemism for death of two lovers being together? If it was, that's pure genius plain and simple.

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    A "...sleep from which you never wake, does not in death make." Simply, to dream away my life for the happiness of the love i've never had was the protrayal of the last section in that. Death would only come when the "dream ends." Meaning within meaning. not far off my friend.

    Far be it for me to be anything special, when the only special thing I desire with me, is the special person I share my gifts with.

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    Oh, so that's what you meant when you wrote dreaming forever. Alright, that was my bad. Anyway, keep it up with your poetry writing.

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