Thread: Poem for my girl

I would appreciate any feedback on it before I hand it over to my GF.

"As the Watercolors Paint the Waves of the Sky"


The waves of the sky sift down
Into the cup the brush is drown
It starts with what I dream
A flake of light, like a beam

A million stars suddenly erupt
the colored landscape is now corrupt
A single figure is left in the snow
Starting off small, it begins to grow

A fantasy from the white takes place
My hopes and dreams begin to chase
A beauty then in front appears
When I start to whisper, she hears:

You are my angel from a million stars
Let's create a song that's only ours
Hanging onto me your hand slowly grips
As I come by your side and steal your lips

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