These seem a bit sad but amazing as well! I love your poem really! I would be very honored to read it again and again! Some how reading this kinda remind me of me but it can't be so I hope to see more!![]()
A varying viewpoint
The psalms of the damned
The light shades the true ambitions of all,
Running and swirling beyond what hides.
Heralding the beauty of life within its grasp,
Shouting out that all is a struggle to ascend to paradise.
Yet the wanderers of many lands ignore,
They do not know of such things as prayer.
Only survival takes priority to every aspect of time,
Revolving around a circle of death that await every corner.
Darkness lies beyond and above the rest,
Fear and murder being the only truths.
Resisting or ignoring leads only to an inevitable state,
All will pray the psalms of the damned one day or the other....
The guidance of the light
We do not need to look further than hope,
Holding our hands to not let us fall.
Yielding the inner strenght of what makes us whole,
Training our souls to accept the inevitable moment of judgement.
There are some that look towards no one,
Folding their arms and not looking back on the days of old.
They deny our fayth though are always welcome to join,
None the less do they fallow a given path as lost lambs.
Deeds of harsh sins are punished severly by the lord,
Granting pardon is the way for those pure of heart.
For them there is no salvation of the soul,
Only a step to where their spirits lay bare to eternal suffering.
The last stand of the stranger
Whatever good comes forth may it be,
There is only dust that will remain of its passing.
A resolution of deeds have no worth where I will be going,
Holding dear to hope takes away time to find food and shelter.
Loneliness is the one journey that makes me vibrate,
Asking not for help as only your wits will show a new day.
Heading to the next destination is but one of many choices,
Nothing is laid out or definate even after it has passed you by.
Hatred or vengence isn't much of a passion to hold onto,
Unless it hinders the needs that keep me alive.
I do not pray to gods or superior beings,
There is only the next step that I can think of right now.
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I rejoice in joy,
There is plentiful of hope,
I smile to your voice,
I do not doubt this feeling,
Relaxing to this language that I do not understand.
Letting my body be one with grace,
Feeling the energy filling my heart,
Trailing back towards the sea of endless waves,
Reaching out without having to catch this sparkle,
Growing before the light that is expressed.
Not denying the emotions that come over me,
Treading along a crossroad of multiple positive aspects,
A rainbow of colors yielding kindness,
Venturing through a tunnel that is complete,
Recesses that will always remain open.
Inspired by listening to Maaya Sakamoto's songs
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From another forum where I was asked to write something that seemed utterly wrong or right. I randomly chose something that normally is essential to humanity, and took what felt wrong at that time while I was thinking about it.
Wrong:
Emotions
Life undone by philosopy,
Creations of the living humanity.
No regret passes those underground,
The mystery remains bound.
Cherishing that in which has been,
Not looking at what lies within.
Resolutions lead by hope,
So many times they could not cope.
Rushing an attempt to daunt an emotion,
Never there is absolution as there always is comotion.
The tear of a loved one no matter the reason,
Holds power beyond any smile or any season.
Last edited by Soldat of life; Jun 22, 2007 at 11:19 AM.
These seem a bit sad but amazing as well! I love your poem really! I would be very honored to read it again and again! Some how reading this kinda remind me of me but it can't be so I hope to see more!![]()
「When I'm sad, I stop being sad and be awesome instead」
You find the first ones sad?!?!?!?!?!?!?! I consider them simply as 3 different viewpoints of the same thing.
The second one isn't supposed to be sad........which I find sad, I thought it was relaxing.
The last one can be sad, tis supposed to be a look at emotions that aren't quite apprecialbe when encountered.
^^ Good that I decided to read them after all... these poems are really great... Strange- I decided I deffinetely have to read these ones because you post poems quite rarely... ^^
I enjoyed reading these poems... the first ones are great, the fact that you could take a look at the world from three different points of view seemed just amazing to me... wonderful!!!
And these lines:
Are just so wonderful that I'm readdy to add it to my fav quotes ^^The tear of a loved one no matter the reason,
Holds power beyond any smile or any season.
A great work here Soldat!!! ^^
Last edited by Soldat of life; Jun 22, 2007 at 01:33 PM. Reason: no real names please ^^
I'm glad you liked them Lasura, I actually edited/revised the second line you quoted as I found it strange.
I'd appreciate that you do not use my real name on the forums, only in PM's if possible![]()
These poems rock my socks! ^_^
You are one hell of a writer! I loved every bit of text in this thread. I don't know what to say, except VERY, VERY GOOD JOB!! Mad props! ^_^
~S
MWahahahahaha....*lets ego take over for one half second*
Back to normal now...so everyone forget that I just laughed out of pride and all...
Thanks atomic_sprout for your appreciation, though I am wondering why you wrote "Mad props"?
*Stun*
^^ Nono silly, in a good way of course! Alright, great vocab, smooth flow, deep meaning, all very good, yes yes, very nice. o.o *elie secretly hopes you write shorter poems* I would love to see a different kind of style from you. And yes your poems are definetely rare nowadays. P/S Why didn't cha post the "Right" poem? You only posted the Wrong one.
Personally I like the 4th one most, it sounded like you were in love! [Very nicely described] Nice job Soldat *nods*
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