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    The Point of no Return


    The Point of No Return


    Wandering in the midst of the desert,
    Salty water flows from the tired body,
    Unsure where this journey might lead,
    Worn-out feet keep on walking.

    Vision is tainted by the sun’s rays,
    Countless images infest the subtle mind,
    Illusions corrupt the entire essence,
    Insanity is within walking distance.

    The search for the oasis goes on,
    As hope fades slowly with time's hand
    The cursed soul is losing its grip,
    Forever lost is thus eternity.

    The beginning is lost
    The present is pointless
    The future is unknown.

    author's notes: This is the shortest poem i ever made ^^ Thanks for reading

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: The Point of no Return

    This is the shortest poem you've made!!?? Oh my good I think it's longer than most of mine...
    I think this is quite a good poem the only line I didn't like was:
    Salty water flows from the tired body,
    it sounds weird...
    The rest of the poem is just great, interesting to read and with a deep thought...

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Re: The Point of no Return

    This sounds so cool!!!!! I like it for its mysteries for some reason!!!!! It some how seems like somethings hiding!!! It seems so cool!!! Hope to see more in the future!!!
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    Re: The Point of no Return

    Quote Originally Posted by raja_psyche View Post

    The Point of No Return


    Wandering in the midst of the desert,
    Salty water flows from the tired body,
    Unsure where this journey might lead,
    Worn-out feet keep on walking.

    Vision is tainted by the sun’s rays,
    Countless images infest the subtle mind,
    Illusions corrupt the entire essence,
    Insanity is within walking distance.

    The search for the oasis goes on,
    As hope fades slowly with time's hand
    The cursed soul is losing its grip,
    Forever lost is thus eternity.

    The beginning is lost
    The present is pointless
    The future is unknown.

    author's notes: This is the shortest poem i ever made ^^ Thanks for reading
    Interesting poem. It's kind of how I feel about like continually walking towards a goal that upon finding it, is nothing. Or simply not there.
    Hopeless.

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    Re: The Point of no Return

    very awesome poem Raja and the way you described
    how life is so random was very cool because with out
    all the harshness of the things that come from going
    through the desert of life therw ould no point in trying
    to refocus your thoughts for a better goal.

    this really give you something to think about and i enjoyed it alot
    your poems are really impresive and i emjoyed this one alot
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: The Point of no Return

    Thanks Lasura, for reading and posting a comment on my poem ^^. I really do Appreciate it and thus, it made me inspire to do more. ^^

    KuwiRules145, thanks for reading and i am happy that you liked the mystery of my poem. ^^

    Thanks for the comment and your insights about my poem, bratling. ^^

    HolderOfTheDarkChalice, thank you for reading my poem and posting your comments and insights. I am also glad that you liked it. ^^ A struggle of living...

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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