Wow....you did a fantastic job on this poem....
I can almost imagine the things that you are describing in your verses.....
The words are very poetic and descriptive...
Great job!!!!!
She came in and suddenly
made it hard to breath.
She made me want to touch
and to get involved
Those unnamed feelings hiding
had quickly earned a name.
No longer simmering underneath
they marched to the surface
She always made a move
but only went halfway,
left that lingering instance
where I was in control
Before I seized the chance
she flew away again.
Only to come back
with her poison kisses
She breaks me day by day
Until I could be nothing.
Yet she picks me up again
with a fleeting smile
As time passes
we will grow apart.
(But) Until I am truly nothing,
her lips will be there, gesturing.
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Well, another /love/ poem put forth for examination. Hopefully this one has flow or rhyme/rhythm... or both><>
So as they say, enjoy.
the love you withhold is the pain you carry.
Wow....you did a fantastic job on this poem....
I can almost imagine the things that you are describing in your verses.....
The words are very poetic and descriptive...
Great job!!!!!
DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON
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