Porcelain

Skin as soft as silk
Love as long as hope
Drifting away
Floating away

Lieing there
in that box
Lieing there
I won't let them cover you with rocks

Lieing still
Juts like your asleep
theres only one difrence
Your just lieing still

You body as lovly as when you had a light
You gave up and ended your fight
You let it go
and nobody knows

Porcelain
as bright as the sun
Porcelain
as white as the moon
Porcelain
soft is your skin
wasting away and missing your kin...

Then they close your box and your face is no more
Taken from me
in the prime of my pain

Porcelain
are you wasting away in your skin
Porcelain
do you miss the love of your kin
Nodding and melting and wasting away
all day

nice flow to the poem, a few spelling mistakes but it's great coz i dunno but i'm getting a mixed message....maybe u're representing ur loved one as the porcelain figure perhaps?

i dunno but it's a great poem all the same

Its a really good poem, though as Blade X pointed out, there were a few mistakes, but that doesn't matter.
I really enjoyed reading it, sad...*sniff*

OMG! So beautiful! And true to my opinon!

I really like it. I think it flows very well. As the others have said, a few miss spelled words, but other than that it is very good.

very good poem.....and very unique title