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    Potential To Be Fantasized

    I was so different
    How did you expect me to regard
    The way all this works?
    Yes, I was meant for you
    But how could you believe
    That i was there for you
    Even when i knew you knew
    You kept playing love like it was just a game
    Pretending to feel the same
    But all you felt was pain
    Until I recoginized
    What you gave me was real
    But out of every girl you knew
    You picked me?
    Now I found this very strange
    Why would you like me anyway?
    Maybe It's because
    I was there every other day

    I fixed these broken things
    Repaired you're broken wings
    Gave you everything
    And made sure you were alright
    I hugged you everytime
    You felt the need to cry
    And gave you all my love.

    You chrished all of me
    You gave me all of it
    Got shot a thousand times
    and knew I was there to help you
    Survive.
    I had no other choice
    Cuz i knew that was the last time
    You
    said
    Good bye.

    You brouhgt so much attention
    to every inch of me
    Made me feel so special
    Got me thinking there was a way
    To free the angel trapped inside

    I knew you needed love
    To have the angel come
    And show you everythings okay
    Its okay
    Whisper all thats right
    Hold you in her arms, tight
    Keep you safe from memories

    That haunt

    Your

    Dreams.

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    Re: Potential To Be Fantasized

    I liked this poem! I feel it flowed well, although I didn't like the ending much.. maybe you could mprove it a little?

    This part:

    I fixed these broken things
    Repaired you're broken wings
    Gave you everything


    Was my favourite! It stuck out more and gave me a better picture like your helping an angel or somthing ^^

    Very nice poem Star Girl! Please keep writing!

    TY Sasurai for the lovely sig!*

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