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    The Poverty of Riches.

    Here's a bit of free verse for those who dislike ryme. Enjoy.


    The Poverty of Riches.

    Pay no attention to democracy,
    Let it slip past you in silence.
    Look only to your wallets,
    and let the bullets bleed your freedom.

    Like eyes drawn to universes,
    we conjugate to banks and lotteries.
    Blinded to why it all began.
    liberty and justice rings no more.

    Obsessed with our only passion,
    hunting and gathering pennies,
    and ink marked paper.
    Where’s the heart in our land?

    The reason we’ve died has deceased,
    and erased our blood with marketing.
    Money begets knowledge,
    in the quest for power.

    To update the reality,
    would bring what’s deserved,
    and as man, we’ll understand,
    the poverty of riches.
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    Re: The Poverty of Riches.

    Well since you commented on my poem I'll return the favor. I'm not a huge fan of poems that don't rhyme, but this one is satisfying despite the abscense of rhyming verses.

    I like how your poem is very fluid and creatively written. And I especially like the verse "like eyes drawn to universes we conjugate to banks and lotteries." That's a very good comparison you've got there. And the title (as the ending) "The poverty of riches" as it expresses how in becoming rich we are drawn into a mental state of emotional poverty.

    Very nice poem in my opinion.
    Death is your most loyal companion, for he will never fail you.

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    Re: The Poverty of Riches.

    you know what makes it good then? It has meaning and FEELING.

    So tired of reading these half assed poems that have NO feeling but are rather a bunch of articulately conjugated arrangement of words made to sound clever...

    *sigh*

    Sorry, little bit of a rant. Anymore takers on this one?
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    Re: The Poverty of Riches.

    i like it its very sad and emotional keep up the good work hope to see more ♥daprincess
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