Soldat of life

Originality


Poetry in blood,
Recklessness towards the audience.
Tears of jade shrapnels,
Hollow soul of complete emptiness.
Ending abrubtly,
Releasing feelings still enchained.

Victory of the singular,
Reason to persevere.
Condemnation of the many,
Interiorisating a firm conviction.
Power left aside,
Seeing the reality in desire.

Hearts of many lay bare,
Needles of confusion all around.
Entering the bowels of life,
Seeing a butterfly pierce the mind.
Meeting the flames of death,
Accepting the fate of the end.


Inspired by the movie Frida, it was well made and I think it may be something that shows us what we are, though through so many facades that you can get lost if you misinterpret but a fraction of it.

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Kasai

I loved Frida, Max. You captured emotion beautifully. I'd prefer a different way of phrasing a few verses, however.

Hearts of many lay bare

Words of plain truth.

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BlueFox1

For an original poem like this there is really not to much I can say except wow! You captured the emotion well, it's very well thought out! Truly brilliant!

Keep up the good work!

BlueFox1

kenchi18

Your scarying me, please stop. That was gooooooood I want more.

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raja_psyche

Wonder piece you got there Soldat!!! wow! i just loved the way you put description into words. your poem creates imagery. keep it up ^^

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Soldat of life

Thankyou everyone, I'm sure to write more....but for that I need more inspiration :P


To Kasai: When you wrote that you would rephrase a few things, could you further expain what you meant? What I can understand is that you would change:

Hearts of many lay bare

to

Words of plain truth.


Is it only that? If so...is it to kame things easier to understand or to be more true to what Frida was showing everyone?

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Kasai

Poetry in blood,
Recklessness towards the audience.

That's a verse I would change. Only because I'm not understanding the connection.

Hearts of many lay bare

Lol. That's just my favorite verse.

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KuRuMi ^.^ [くるみ] NoiR

wow! i love this poem!! this is defenitly an awesome style! i really admire ur work! i can feel the emotions as i read. deep & strong.
btw: i love ur siggie! it's of Noir, isn't it??

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