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    The Power of inspiration

    Originality


    Poetry in blood,
    Recklessness towards the audience.
    Tears of jade shrapnels,
    Hollow soul of complete emptiness.
    Ending abrubtly,
    Releasing feelings still enchained.

    Victory of the singular,
    Reason to persevere.
    Condemnation of the many,
    Interiorisating a firm conviction.
    Power left aside,
    Seeing the reality in desire.

    Hearts of many lay bare,
    Needles of confusion all around.
    Entering the bowels of life,
    Seeing a butterfly pierce the mind.
    Meeting the flames of death,
    Accepting the fate of the end.



    Inspired by the movie Frida, it was well made and I think it may be something that shows us what we are, though through so many facades that you can get lost if you misinterpret but a fraction of it.
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    Re: The Power of inspiration

    I loved Frida, Max. You captured emotion beautifully. I'd prefer a different way of phrasing a few verses, however.

    Hearts of many lay bare

    Words of plain truth.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: The Power of inspiration

    For an original poem like this there is really not to much I can say except wow! You captured the emotion well, it's very well thought out! Truly brilliant!

    Keep up the good work!

    BlueFox1

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    Re: The Power of inspiration

    Your scarying me, please stop. That was gooooooood I want more.
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    Re: The Power of inspiration

    Wonder piece you got there Soldat!!! wow! i just loved the way you put description into words. your poem creates imagery. keep it up ^^

    Thank you very much,Reese for this wonderful signature ^_^

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    Re: The Power of inspiration

    Thankyou everyone, I'm sure to write more....but for that I need more inspiration :P


    To Kasai: When you wrote that you would rephrase a few things, could you further expain what you meant? What I can understand is that you would change:

    Hearts of many lay bare

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    Words of plain truth.


    Is it only that? If so...is it to kame things easier to understand or to be more true to what Frida was showing everyone?
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    Re: The Power of inspiration

    Poetry in blood,
    Recklessness towards the audience.


    That's a verse I would change. Only because I'm not understanding the connection.

    Hearts of many lay bare

    Lol. That's just my favorite verse.
    Seduced by Flesh


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    Re: The Power of inspiration

    wow! i love this poem!! this is defenitly an awesome style! i really admire ur work! i can feel the emotions as i read. deep & strong.
    btw: i love ur siggie! it's of Noir, isn't it??
    Carpe Diem. Quam minimum credula postero! (:

    Wishing, waiting, dreaming..

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