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    Priority

    I've made you a priority,
    You've only made a fool of me.

    Something for which I yearn.
    As if I'd get another turn.
    Just ashes, since you watched me burn.
    Lesson learned.
    Lesson learned.

    I'm not even option C.
    Yet you've been number one to me.

    I'd go running to your beckon.
    I wouldn't waste a second.
    Still my intention's questioned...
    Second guessing?
    Learned my lesson.

    No balance will ever be...
    And still I feed a this dying tree.

    In burns inside, to face it.
    I've tried to be complacent.
    Love, so thick I can taste it.
    Who'll repalce it?
    Is it wasted?

    Learned lessons provide much wealth.
    Making my number one, .....myself.
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    Wow, I really like this one peach! Its really, its like you put every ounce of your emotion into it ^.^ I think that its a tiny-bit long, but other than that, its perfect. Great work on your part.

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    Re: Priority

    I am on Sol's side. I really like this and can see a lot of emotion in it.
    I don't think it's long I've seen some long poems from ya'. Haha.
    But yes. Very well written and great emotion.
    I really really dig this one.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Priority

    Quote Originally Posted by Sol-x View Post
    I think that its a tiny-bit long
    Long? You think -THIS- is long?
    Aw, thats cute.... But thank you both for the compliments and the time it took to read this (unbarebly long LOL) piece.
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    Re: Priority

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    Long? You think -THIS- is long?
    Aw, thats cute.... But thank you both for the compliments and the time it took to read this (unbarebly long LOL) piece.
    LOL. I only said tiny, not I said is was as long as an essay XD. But I still loved it regardless. It was a little unbearable(im lieing through my teeth right now XP), but I still thought it rocked (not lieing now XP)

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