Wow, I really like this one peach! Its really, its like you put every ounce of your emotion into it ^.^ I think that its a tiny-bit long, but other than that, its perfect. Great work on your part.
I've made you a priority,
You've only made a fool of me.
Something for which I yearn.
As if I'd get another turn.
Just ashes, since you watched me burn.
I'm not even option C.
Yet you've been number one to me.
I'd go running to your beckon.
I wouldn't waste a second.
Still my intention's questioned...
Learned my lesson.
No balance will ever be...
And still I feed a this dying tree.
In burns inside, to face it.
I've tried to be complacent.
Love, so thick I can taste it.
Who'll repalce it?
Is it wasted?
Learned lessons provide much wealth.
Making my number one, .....myself.
Last edited by Peach_follows; Feb 10, 2009 at 11:19 AM.
... Not Ever Again...
I am on Sol's side. I really like this and can see a lot of emotion in it.
I don't think it's long I've seen some long poems from ya'. Haha.
But yes. Very well written and great emotion.
I really really dig this one.
You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!