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    Punishment

    For everything there is a punishment...
    I am serving punishment for your lies...

    And I am wondering...
    Why does it hurt so much?
    Is it going to stop?
    I hope it will...
    Because I am serving the most painfull punishment of them all...
    And you made me serve it...

    Yes...I did it again...
    I forgave you...
    Don't make me regret it...

    But, how can I not forgive you...
    I love your brown eyes...
    Your every smile...
    Your strong hands...
    The way you hold me...
    The way you look at me...
    Thw way you kiss me...
    How can I resist?
    I can't...
    So I forgive...
    And I hope I won't be disappointed...

    I am sitting here alone...again
    You said you'd come back...
    You ****ing lied as always...
    So I am serving another punishment...
    I tried to sleep...
    But my pillow is too wet of my tears...
    Please come back...
    I miss you just as much as I hate you...
    I love you...
    And I'll be waitin, as always...


    it's nothing special...there are probably gramar mistakes...i hope you like it
    and if i was rude...well it was the way of expressing feelings at the time

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    Re: punishment

    very cool expression of resentment
    in this poem and you shouldnt have
    to wait if they were gonna be there
    for you there wouldnt be so much anger.

    life is full of thing that make you hate/resent
    things but you have to learn to let it go even if
    it means letting that person go because of how
    they disrespect you in so many ways there not
    worth the punishment you put your self through.

    i liked this poem it was really thought out
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: punishment

    Oh my god!!!! This poem is just great!!! I really, really love it!!! There are just so many things that I like abot this poem that I'd better not count them...

    A great poem picoboca!!! Enjoyed reading it sooooooooo bad!!! I'll be waiting forward for another one!!!

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    Re: punishment

    OMG! I love it! That was fantastic! It reminds me of thing I've felt before. It kicks the S*** outta both my "Love Sick" poems. Mad props! ^_^

    It goes to show ya that with every action, there must be a re-action (or consequence). And it's sad when one person has do deal with the consequences of somebody else's actions. I know how that goes. Once again, good job! I hope to read more.


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    Re: punishment

    wow
    you peopel liked it...i didn't expect that good critics...(blush)
    well i have some more poems...but i have to corect gramar...and spelling and everything...thanks for r8...hope to see more coments

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