The Quiet One

The Quiet One
Always running from the thing I need
Always fighting all attempts for friendship
Struggling to break free of this hold
Struggling to regain my senses
Knowing it's what I want
Knowing it's my last chance
Why can't I speak?
Why can't I stop you from walking away?
Don't leave me alone again
Don't snuff out the light leading me from darkness
Always alone, forever afraid
Always watching, neve a part of it
Doesn't anyone notice?
Doesn't anyone care?
No one will weep as the light dies
Imprisoning me in eternal darkness

the one who nvrs speaks to people.....keeps to themselves......watch the world with careful eyes.....but when they see something u want they cannot move......their speech is gone......it is a fate worst then death itself. this is a good short poem. hope u continue writing them.

this poem is pretty kool the pattern used is kinda kool, nice job keep it up.

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Originally Posted by whitefoxdemon

The Quiet One
Always running from the thing I need
Always fighting all attempts for friendship
Struggling to break free of this hold
Struggling to regain my senses
Knowing it's what I want
Knowing it's my last chance
Why can't I speak?
Why can't I stop you from walking away?
Don't leave me alone again
Don't snuff out the light leading me from darkness
Always alone, forever afraid
Always watching, neve a part of it
Doesn't anyone notice?
Doesn't anyone care?
No one will weep as the light dies
Imprisoning me in eternal darkness

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My two favorite lines. I think that loneliness is best touched on when we bring up entrapment and show the reader that we are in a dark place...but I think it gets overused...good work though.

It's so good! I liked he words you used. My fav. line is
'Always alone forever afraid''
Until the one where it goes 'Doesn't anyone care?'
Good Job!

I like you poem. Its cool. It some how reminds me of...me