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  1. Mar 03, 2007 10:45 AM #1
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    Talking Rain

    How beautiful is the Rain
    it makes me release
    It takes away the pain
    It brings more than peace,
    it brings Hope and satisfaction
    even when yesterday those words didn't exist...
    Hope... that I'll do better this time.
    Satisfaction... because I learned from my mistakes
    I wouldn't fail again
    At least not the way I failed before.
    I can try, I am not a looser.
    Maybe takes me some time
    but I'll be better this time...
    The rain has cleaned the way...
    now the sun beggings to rise...
    A light begins to shine
    I CAN DO IT!!!
    Yes... I can do it....
    But I promise tomorrow will rain again...
    It always does....


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    Re: Rain

    Wow.... I was VERY enterained by this. I loved everything about it. It seemed to have layers of meaning. Great rythm, great imagery. And I love the end, where you promise tomorrows rain. It tied it all together.
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    Re: Rain

    I love this poem though in the middle I did get a little confused... I quoted my favorite lines.

    I CAN DO IT!!!
    Yes... I can do it....
    But I promise tomorrow will rain again...
    It always does....
    Thes are my favorite lines, especially the last two because they are similar to lines I love to use at the end of my favorite poems. ^_^ Keep them coming!

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  4. Mar 03, 2007 08:41 PM #4
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    Re: Rain

    An intersting poem but i think
    A light begins to shine
    I CAN DO IT!!!
    Yes... I can do it....
    that line seems out of place. Other than that, its quite a strong poem. Keep it up.

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    Re: Rain

    strong poem...but i don't get it..wats the ties between rain and hope...?
    anyway..nice poem ~!
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    Quote Originally Posted by RayMe View Post
    strong poem...but i don't get it..wats the ties between rain and hope...?
    anyway..nice poem ~!
    The rain washed my mistakes... it gave me the hope that I can try again on a clean road
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    Re: Rain

    I had similar poem like this but I say your's is way better than mine lol, keep it up and hope to read more.
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    Re: Rain

    This was a nice poem, Lebby. I enjoyed it. It was a little confusing in some parts, not clear, but all together it had a nice mesage. It was as if rain wipes away the mess most people make, making their destination clearer to them in a way. Nice poem, leb-chan!
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