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    Rain

    I thought of one thing in my life
    But that one thing cannot suffice
    How can this bring me happiness
    If it always brings me sadness

    After that day, I lost my trust
    My depression makes a big fuss
    Among the people I care for
    But I can't help it therefore

    A blind game of love
    I shouldn't push or shove
    To get that someone I want
    With all the hard to get and taunt

    I thought I had him in my grasp
    Yet it's very far from that clasp
    How foolish I can be
    How hard is it to see

    That I'm not destined
    Not of his consent
    Save me from this despair



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    Re: Rain

    love ur poem...sorry i don't have a poem yet...i think that is true...hmm i'll make up a poem next time when i come back to this forum...

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    Re: Rain

    aww... it's kinda sad but i like it keep ↑ the good work i hope to see more

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    Re: Rain

    Make sure to add periods and commas to make it flow better. Other than that, it's a nice poem. Good job.
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    Re: Rain

    i agree with princess, its really sad. but its still good, keep up the godd work akura-chan

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    Re: Rain

    It's a very good poem, it's a little sad like "shouichishindo" and "iluvmyloser" said.... Anyway keep up the good work Akura ^^

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    Re: Rain

    Agreed with Alucard and the rest... Deo said what would help the poem more..

    It's a good poem ^^ good job.. keep up the good work now~

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    Re: Rain

    thank you all so much everyone!^^ And deo I'll b e sure to do that next time thnks for the pointer so anyways glad all of you liked it~!^^



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