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    Rain's Comfort

    Inside.
    Let me go outside!
    Please. It's raining.
    Please let me go outside.
    Please let me tell the sky it isn't the only one that cries.
    Rain.
    Staring at it... It gives me comfort.
    Please let me go out and dance in it. I love the rain.
    I'll open the window.

    Wait. It's locked.

    No! Please unlock the window. Please. Hurry before it stops crying.
    I'll open the door. I'll open the door and cry with the sky.
    The sky's hurt. It feels what I feel. I feel what it feels. Please let me comfort the sky, as it comforts me.

    Yes! It opened!

    I can walk outside into the ra-- what..
    What happened? The sky's tears stopped falling. What happened?
    No. I'm too late.

    I look up at the sky.

    "Please sky. Give me back my comfort. Look! These water drops fall from my eyes as well! My heart feels like lead. Please sky, let it rain again."

    My knees hurt from the sudden fall I consciously make to the ground.
    I scream.
    The never ending tears falling from my eyes make a puddle near my feet.
    More tears fall to the ground. One after another. Faster and faster. More and more.

    I notice. These tears. They aren't mine. I look around..

    Rain. It's raining.

    It started to rain again! It left then came back. Just like my tears.
    They come, leave, only to return once more.
    I bring myself to an alleyway and sit, leaning against the wall.

    My knees to my chest, my arms wrapped around my legs. My face tucked in between my legs...

    I cry. I cry with the sky. No one will ever know I cry with the sky. It is a secret only I share with the sky. I smile in my head at that thought,

    and cry.


    Some very odd poem I created a while back. o___o;; comments?
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    Re: Rain's Comfort

    WOW!!! I love it! I love poems refuring to the rain. They always seem so good. I love how you cry with the sky. I've tried to write a poem like that, only the sky was crying with me. ^_^ I enjoyed it and look forward to reading even more poems from you. ^_^

    Come dance in the rain with me, no one is watching.

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    Re: Rain's Comfort

    Alot of comfort in it lol, I like it, so far this is the 2nd poem of rain I read, though your way better at rain than I am, hope to see more.

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    Re: Rain's Comfort

    Thank you star and hellknight. I appreciate your feedback! I'm glad you guys enjoyed my poem. I personally thought it wasn't all that great, which it probably isn't, but hey.. we all have a right to write, right? lol.

    Thank you guys for reading

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    Re: Rain's Comfort

    T.T im crying with u o ye sky lol

    really touching... nice job... why i can't stop..

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    Re: Rain's Comfort

    O__o;; Are you teasing me, ray-kun? lol. Well anywho, I'm glad you liked it. I don't think it was that great that it'd touch people, lol. But whatever, just go with the flow, y'know? Thanks, reami.

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    Re: Rain's Comfort

    its was good i liked it i got confuse for a moment but im blonde lol i liked it alot
    Im the type of girl who burst out laughing in silents about something that happened yesterday

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    Re: Rain's Comfort

    Oh thank you, fredsboo. I'm sorry it was a little confusing for you. I'm sure it wasn't because you're blonde though. It was a little confusing for me as well. And I wrote it ^ ^; Well, thank you for your comments.

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