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    Rainy Day

    On the sidewalk you can see
    the tears of the sky falling down hard.
    It falls down from the gray blanket of
    clouds, only to hit the ground and disspear.

    Thunder sounds, as if the Gods themselves
    are letting out a battlecry; scaring children
    and adult alike. The storm fears no one.

    I stand outside of my home and I stare at
    the rain. Wondering whether or not I should
    join the sky in a good cry. Just as the thought
    passes, the sky begins to part.

    The sun is visible behind a few clouds and
    the rain turns in to a light sprinkle.
    Birds start to chirp and children come out
    to play. During all this, a smile hits my face.

    I really need to do something about this
    seasonal depression...


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    Re: Rainy Day

    Wow......this is really good......it is almost if I can hear the rain falling down
    Great job!!!!!!!!!!!
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    Re: Rainy Day

    ^-^ I liked this one.. it started out kinda sad and everything but you turned it into something happy... >< my my that just sounded cheesy.. anyway.. I liked this poem and i would love to see some more from you. ^-^ keep up the good work. ^-^

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    Re: Rainy Day

    Thanks a lot you guys! I'm glad you like this one. This one was kind of an experiment. I usually don't write like this, but after seeing your comment, I may continue to do so. ^_^


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    Re: Rainy Day

    There was something I didn't like about it despite it being well written and worded. I donno. I like the idea though. Seasonal depression sucks though.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Rainy Day

    Ahh... really nice... reminded me of myself when I came back to London and just wanted to cry with the rain and sing or shout with the wind...

    a nice work with descriptions and putting your feelings in it... I really enjoyed reading this. And I love the ending- it has the charm all your poems have... your poems are really down to the ground, never too lovely dovey, never too sad... I really like that.

    I hope to see more ^^

    My recommended fanfic: "Dreamer" by Scourge

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    Thanks to Lasura and bratling for your words. You two are my top favorite writers here, so it makes me happy to see your comments on my work! ^_^


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    Re: Rainy Day

    Well you comment most of my work so I make it a point to let you know what I tihnk of yours. Especially when I enjoy it.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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