+ Reply to Thread
Results 1 to 5 of 5

Thread: A Random Poem

  1. #1
    Devoted Otaku N.Y._Soulja may be famous one day N.Y._Soulja may be famous one day N.Y._Soulja's Avatar
    Join Date
    May 2005
    Location
    Miami
    Posts
    603
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts

    A Random Poem

    I'ma Renegade.
    Never been afraid
    to say wats on my mind
    cuz what I gotta say
    is wat I gotta say.

    But I don't play
    I'll stay head on every god damn day.
    All's done, and I've got not a thing to say
    Don't look at me and say hey.
    Life ain't the same.

    Its all gone
    The sh!t changed
    but hey!
    here's Mr. Don't Give a F*ck
    to tell you the truth you suck,
    not worth a buck,
    not a second thought

    You're a joke,
    not worth a smoke.
    Just get away
    go on sway
    ...

    In the end I'm right.
    I'll never die without a fight.
    So have at you!
    Come en guarde!
    You old tard!

    The day's coming,
    and we'll keep gunnin
    lets do it
    cock it
    pop it
    show it
    load it
    shoot!
    hurry or death'll give you the boot
    You should stop talking about your dreams, and start making them.

    http://kuv319.tumblr.com/

    There is something so human in the desire to never give up, while at the same time, never giving it your all?

  2. #2
    Domme Kasai may be famous one day Kasai may be famous one day Kasai's Avatar
    Join Date
    Nov 2004
    Location
    Florida
    Posts
    2,736
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts

    Re: A Random Poem

    Hmm. Thanks for the breaks. but now you have to work on the flow of the poem. Everything went down hill on the 4th stanza. The beat changed and messed me all up. Rather, I should say the meter changed. The stanzas got smaller. T_T
    Seduced by Flesh


  3. #3
    You's Trollin Pro Leafblower Champion, Helicopter Champion ketaro is making a name for themselves ketaro is making a name for themselves ketaro's Avatar
    Join Date
    Apr 2005
    Posts
    4,293
    Thanks
    30
    Thanked 38 Times in 36 Posts

    Re: A Random Poem

    Nice poem man, but your 5th stanza didn't rhyme at all, but still it was a great poem.

  4. #4
    Otaku Sincere may be famous one day Sincere may be famous one day Sincere's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2006
    Location
    Justin's heart
    Posts
    305
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 0 Times in 0 Posts

    Re: A Random Poem

    Quote Originally Posted by N.Y._Soulja
    The day's coming,
    and we'll keep gunnin
    lets do it
    cock it
    pop it
    show it
    load it
    shoot!
    hurry or death'll give you the boot
    I especially liked this part for some reason. Very nice poem, I get how you feel.
    C:\Documents and Settings\Julia\My Documents\My Pictures\Siggy.jpg
    A white rose no longer alone
    I know who's heart it is to represent
    I didn't pick it, but i let it grow
    For he's the one that's heaven sent. :
    I love you, my White Rose.: The Poop Forums

  5. #5
    Elie Jelly elie26 may be famous one day elie26 may be famous one day elie26's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2006
    Location
    Hell is an understatement
    Posts
    593
    Thanks
    0
    Thanked 1 Time in 1 Post

    Re: A Random Poem

    yea this sounds like some rap songs...

    kewl ^_^ Although I didn't get what it meant...when u read it....

    I don't think the stanza's an issue. Everyone has their own way and style....so yeah....nice job ^^

+ Reply to Thread

Similar Threads

  1. Sometimes (Random Poem)
    By Shade/K' Heart in forum Poems
    Replies: 1
    Last Post: Jun 20, 2006, 02:21 PM
  2. A Poem is a Poem
    By Shade/K' Heart in forum Poems
    Replies: 5
    Last Post: May 02, 2006, 09:32 AM
  3. A poem by my friend Shane Pruitt.
    By Shade/K' Heart in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 4
    Last Post: Jun 04, 2005, 12:15 PM
  4. My Life As Poem
    By Shade/K' Heart in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 8
    Last Post: May 02, 2005, 12:14 AM
  5. A Poem About Writing a Poem
    By Shade/K' Heart in forum The Thread Vault
    Replies: 3
    Last Post: Apr 10, 2005, 10:44 AM

Bookmarks

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts