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    Random Rhyme

    I have strange thoughts.
    randomly, they deliver shots
    to my head and tell me to
    take fights out to the parking lot.

    But I'm a man of peace,
    much love and chicken grease.
    Though I'll fight to defend the
    ones who hate on me the least.

    I have these weird days
    when I won't come out to play.
    I'd much rather stay at home
    watch anime and blow hay.

    But I gotta have my job,
    cuz I love my son a lot
    and I wanna be sure that
    he can have what I never got.

    I guess I'm a funny guy.
    You can see it in my eyes
    that I've been around the block...
    Ugh, not like that! You're nasty, guys!

    But I've seen a lot of things
    that would make most human beings
    just point at god and ask him
    why, to them, suffering he brings.

    Just remember, for your health:
    If you've got happiness, you've got wealth
    and if not, then you've got
    nobody else to blame but yourself.


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    Re: Random Rhyme

    Not my favorite... Sounded kind of forced, but maybe that's cus I had a hard time finding the rhythm. Which has never happened in your poetry with me before. I usually find it eventually.

    You never really loved me/You never really cared/It was all just a game to boost your ego/Those feelings never really there/ I'm filing emotional bankruptcy/My heart can take no more debt/Theres no more "money" there to spend. === Besides tee hee SHE loves me!

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    Re: Random Rhyme

    I guess I'm a funny guy.
    You can see it in my eyes
    that I've been around the block...
    Ugh, not like that! You're nasty, guys!

    But I've seen a lot of things
    that would make most human beings
    just point at god and ask him
    why, to them, suffering he brings.
    Ha... this part made me laugh. I love how you incorporate humor into your work. Hmmm, this wouldn't have been inspired by a certain God debate would it?

    Anyway I thought this flowed very nicely... like lyrics. Or atleast some type of spoken word... Its one of those poems where you can invision it being performed.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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