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    ray of light...

    I wrote this about a year ago so...

    ray of light

    for every shinning star
    there is a ray of light
    shinning down, giving people hope
    as they dance throughout the night

    for every ray of light
    there is a shadow forming darkness
    building up while trying to fight
    until it finally breaks free

    shinning down on people
    giving them hope
    as the world around them
    crumbles under pressure

    as they dance throughout the night
    they was away their sanity
    and pull eachother close
    letting love surround their hearts

    So i was wondering... what do you think???

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    Re: ray of light...

    (Twirls) I like it! It feels like I'm flying in the solar system for some reason reading it and it sound so helpful as well. Hope to read more of your poems!
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    Re: ray of light...

    I think this poem sents you to somewhere that you cannot imagine that your flying away into a different place likt the outer of universe of hope that is what i truly think and this poem is very hlepful into reviving someone up from there sadness into a hopeful joy of hope.

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    Re: ray of light...

    It's not bad actually ^_^ It's just repetition of love and hope.. I wish there were more ideas as well, though

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    Re: ray of light...

    Quote Originally Posted by Rave_Grip View Post
    It's not bad actually ^_^ It's just repetition of love and hope.. I wish there were more ideas as well, though
    thanxs you guys... all of ya... ^^ I have others but this one was the first one I wrote... i just can't seem to be able to write one as good as this... in my mind anyway... ^^ I'm glad you guys like it...

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