!Jamie5192

I wrote this about a year ago so...

ray of light

for every shinning star
there is a ray of light
shinning down, giving people hope
as they dance throughout the night

for every ray of light
there is a shadow forming darkness
building up while trying to fight
until it finally breaks free

shinning down on people
giving them hope
as the world around them
crumbles under pressure

as they dance throughout the night
they was away their sanity
and pull eachother close
letting love surround their hearts

So i was wondering... what do you think???

KuwiRules145

(Twirls) I like it! It feels like I'm flying in the solar system for some reason reading it and it sound so helpful as well. Hope to read more of your poems!

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dark1angel

I think this poem sents you to somewhere that you cannot imagine that your flying away into a different place likt the outer of universe of hope that is what i truly think and this poem is very hlepful into reviving someone up from there sadness into a hopeful joy of hope.

Rave_Grip

It's not bad actually ^_^ It's just repetition of love and hope.. I wish there were more ideas as well, though

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!Jamie5192

thanxs you guys... all of ya... ^^ I have others but this one was the first one I wrote... i just can't seem to be able to write one as good as this... in my mind anyway... ^^ I'm glad you guys like it...