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    The Real...

    Please if someone can comment me if it's good, or it's lame, would be nice.

    They will never see the real me,
    They only see who they want me to be,
    I'm trapped inside this crystal cage,
    but no one has the key for it,
    It's been so long since I have truly smiled,
    I have been crying for a long time,
    no one seems to care of what's inside,
    they can't see what's hidden behind this eyes,
    so many things are happening in my mind,
    so many things I cannot bare nor share,
    so many lies that i've been told,
    so many reasons for me to hide inside and be so cold,
    I promised myself not to open anymore,
    I haven't felt this callous before,
    No one will get to me anymore,
    I made a mistake and believed in you,
    But i can see things for what they really are,
    You'll never ever say the truth,
    So it's a waste of time to believe lie after lie,
    I'm coming down this time,
    i'm drowning in my tears,
    Gazing all my fears becoming real,
    But there is something that it's true,
    I'm already coming for you, to take you down,
    Because you act like you know me, but you don't.
    Don't make that mistake twice...
    Never in your life...
    i'm stronger than the girl i used to be...
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    Re: The Real...

    oh... what a sad poem you got there. the idea of your poem is interesting. people tend to be blinded on what they want to see, without taking in consideration the true identity of the person they see. this poem expresses deep sadness, sorrow, and the eagerness to recover from an experience. it also, depicts the eagerness to lock one self from others... in order not to get hurt anymore... all in all superb poem.
    <is getting absorbed by the imagery...

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    Re: The Real...

    thanks a lot. It's good to know someone understands all that i meant while writin that. Appreciate ur comment.
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    Re: The Real...

    i like this poem soinds like a frind who every one see's
    what they want .ht is a veery smaert freind but there belife in his
    ignoramce has gave him low self esteem , this pome really talk about how poeple look art everyone else before looking at them self's wich is how life is.
    vaery good read. you did good
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: The Real...

    wow, thats a really sad poem,
    uhmmm, no matter how much you ignore those people,
    they will still criticeze you, right?
    and

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    Re: The Real...

    well... not exactly, they don't critizice me, they just treat me like i'm something else, which is uncomfortable and they won't admit nor accept who i am, despite how much i tell them i'm not who they think i am.
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    Re: The Real...

    OMG!!! a-we-so-me! i can see ur inner self out in this poem, true and deep emotions. I truly liked it. keep on writin plz.
    I'll be your hope, i'll be your wish, i'll be everything that you need...
    I'm gonna take your soul out of your body-Hikaru&Shia
    Wanna know something stupid? i'm watching yaz xD
    Shia i lovez ya! and ya poems!
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    Re: The Real...

    Yes,your poem was awesome but next time,check your spellings.It might confuse readers like the spelling of cristal,it should be crystal...I hope this will be the last time you'll end up with mispelled words...^_^

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