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    The real you.

    The truth is ugly,
    And it often hurts.

    But I want it,
    Either way.

    I give it to you,
    So I diserve it back.

    Because it's faith ,
    In you I lack.

    Even if it's ugly,
    A dark mean truth.

    I'd rather hear it,
    From only you.

    I won't abandon,
    Even if I don't,

    Want to hear.
    Ugly, mean
    Dark or cruel.

    It won't effect,
    What I think of you.

    I've been there,
    My mind is dark too.

    Pain and torment,
    Boiling beneth,
    A pretty smile.

    So I understand,
    And you should too,
    Be able to show me,
    The real you.

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    Re: The real you.

    ^^ perfecto lol i enjoyed your poem=] cant wait to read more^^
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    Wow! I appriciate it. Nice sig too! she's adorible.

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    Re: The real you.

    I know how u feel!!! I know how it is when you wish someone would rather tell anyone and maybe hurt you than keep it all inside and... well it will come out sooner or later and it will be just worse...

    And I like the way you wrote it (the short stranzas), it was really easy to read this and very interesting... nice work ^^

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    Re: The real you.

    Perfectly word it, i enjoyed every bit of it. it was a really nice written poem.

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    Re: The real you.

    agreed with wat u guys said it is a very good poem again bratling good job..

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    Wow so many comments. I appriciate them all. THanks so much. I'm glad you enjoy my witing so much Rayme. Laura, I love your comments because you enter crtisizem without being rude, in most of them. Thanks and keep commenting me

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    Re: The real you.

    Nice *Dark* poem I like read it ..how much you weiting to see the real of him ...?
    and really good poem ..so keep it up ...^^

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