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    “Realizing the Truth”

    What I decide for this day?
    That’s a good question for today;
    Should I say the truth?
    But it will hurt for sure.
    Well nobody is perfect,
    And many are rejected.
    But right now is my decision,
    And I am coming into affliction;
    This is the best way for us,
    I hope you can understand.
    We should be fallowing our own way,
    I’m not forcing you to stay.
    If you love me it’s ok,
    I just want you to be saved.

    I don’t want to be an obstacle,
    I’m not the one for you.
    So, just continue running,
    And make up your attitude,
    Don’t look for me any more,
    You’re wasting your time.
    The time is becoming short,
    And you are living a lie.

    You haven’t realize it yet,
    That all this have been set;
    Or you want me to show you,
    And tell you “I don’t love you anymore.”


    Be honest and comment. please. I haven't write since last year. so please comment
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    Do not dwell in the past... do not wonder about the future... just life the present to the fullness...

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    Re: “Realizing the Truth”

    i like the rhyme scheme of the poem so that was pretty nice. minor spelling mistakes but noboy's perfect lol^^. your details were on point. message was on point. correct format. the flow was alright it seemed awkward in some lines but overall good job
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    Re: “Realizing the Truth”

    Quote Originally Posted by blackrose92 View Post
    i like the rhyme scheme of the poem so that was pretty nice. minor spelling mistakes but noboy's perfect lol^^. your details were on point. message was on point. correct format. the flow was alright it seemed awkward in some lines but overall good job
    Than for the comment, i still working in my spelling. This is one of my first poems in English, usually i write in Spanish, i will be writing more, i hope you like them.
    Do not dwell in the past... do not wonder about the future... just life the present to the fullness...

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