Thread: Regret

Nicely done there my friend... the flow was very good... ^^

There are things that make you real mad
Because it's been a real bad day
Friends betraying you and not telling the truth
You want them to go away

a suggestion... try to repeat the same word lesser.. as less as you could and i see a few other words can go with that ^^

Trust in your feelings and mind
Someday your life well come back together
Do something you won't regret
That how it stay's forever.

nice... a nice way to end the poem.. the poem seems to go on forever.. it keeps an impact to the poem..making it linger in the minds of the reader... keep it up man ^^ a very nice piece...

Very Regretful you have here in this impressive poem and also how you described it very tentively although the last stanza got me really regretful.

I wish to see more of this please it felt like this would get the attention for the moment and would let go in your mind when you experienced this type of relationship with your friends.

LOL, alright Ray, I'll try to take your advice and maybe I'll repeat some of the words I had said, even though I don't like repeating myself, but I'll try

And angel, thanks for such a good comment and I'll try to make something kind a like this ok?

Not a bad poem. To improve, try to make it flow a little more. Overall, I like it.

Thanks tifa, I'll try and consider of what you said, and thanks for a great comment.