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    Regretful



    Tears fall from my face like rain falls to the ground
    Wondering what I did to deserve such a fate as this.
    A friend who loved life to the fullest extent now gone
    Like the warming rays of the sun right before it snows.

    Remembering all the things that transpired between us
    Trying to rewrite history like a poorly written chapter.
    My thoughts and emotions start to get the better of me
    Like a childhood rival competing for the same reward.

    The relationship that we once held so dear destroyed
    Like a thief whose creditability that has lost all value.
    You smile as you leave me to wallow in my self pity
    The truth released like a bird after being imprisoned.

    Now I sit wondering what I can do to get you back
    Like a dog ponders the mystery of catching his tail.
    Hope no longer an option to resolve our differences
    My friend is gone from my life like a summer’s breeze.


    This poem gave me the most difficulty but I hope that it turned out okay!

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    Re: Regretful

    hey blue,you should put (.) on each ending of each one,well that's my advice I'm not really good at giving advice^^;;
    but none the less beautiful

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    Re: Regretful

    Yeah you're right about the punctuation! I'll go back and make the necessary changes! Thanks for the advice flaminghate!

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    Re: Regretful

    very cool poem bro and i see where you are coming from
    loosing something like a friendship is hard ,ecspecialy when
    that friend was someone that meant the world to you as
    some you felt close to, but just like the the breeze go;es away
    it will come back so no worries you will feel that breeze again one
    day.

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    Quote Originally Posted by HolderOfTheDarkChalice View Post
    very cool poem bro and i see where you are coming from
    loosing something like a friendship is hard ,ecspecialy when
    that friend was someone that meant the world to you as
    some you felt close to, but just like the the breeze go;es away
    it will come back so no worries you will feel that breeze again one
    day.
    Thanks Bro I knew you would understand where I was coming from with this one! I appreciate the help, and I know that you right about the breeze! I don't know where I'd be without you, Angel, fma1012, and Cherryblossom! You guys are the greatest!

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    Re: Regretful

    thanks but yuor a pretty good writer your self
    and every breeze has a drection like i said so
    there is always a chnage for it to come back your way
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Quote Originally Posted by HolderOfTheDarkChalice View Post
    thanks but yuor a pretty good writer your self
    and every breeze has a drection like i said so
    there is always a chnage for it to come back your way
    Bro you absolutely right! The breeze can change directions and the possiblity of it coming back my way is definitely possible! But breezes can be confusing like life itself! Because no matter what so how it's going to change direction, but the question is will you or myself for that matter be ready for a change? Thanks Bro!

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    Re: Regretful

    Wow....that was wonderful,deep,pure and honest.I'm left speachless here.Wonderful job.
    Made by- Ryomakurosaki (Thank you sooooo much!!) ^__^

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