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    relax me

    white light..
    sun shines my face..my eyes... my tears.
    a soft light..
    but it is a strong light for my weak heart
    very comfortable for me
    shining all place around me

    the wind flows
    bringing me, plants, animals, and insects the new life..
    bringing me to another world..
    allowing me to forget my hate.
    allowing me to forget my sadness.
    allowing me to forget my unsatisfulness
    it fulfill my hollow heart with new fresh feel as a human being.

    hope i can feel this a little longer..
    runing from the hollow in human life...
    which make me sad.
    let me rest in here for a while.
    let me take a deep breath before i come back to my work
    just one minute more.

    hope i can feel this a little longer...
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    Re: relax me

    This poem is kinda relaxing but the words are too deep enough. I can clearly relate to this poem...^_^

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    Re: relax me

    The poem is relaxing, just some of the word kind of cancel out the peacefully relaxation you are trying to describe! Overall good job on the poem!

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    Re: relax me

    oh. thanks.
    really, i'm not sure it is the best i can do.
    but, thanks.

    i make this when i'm in the outdoor and the wind flows..
    that make me feel comfort. it was a place where i can get fresh air and beautiful looking.
    many trees, and many book. just said it was library.

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