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    Revision

    Poetry, as if it were encoded, encrypted
    With my intimate thoughts, selectively known.

    The delicate web you're spinning, has shifted
    With you entangled in the feeling of alone.

    Remind me of the absence of my significance.
    Entertained, You partner in my fall from glory.

    I admit, you work with such magnificence.
    Heightened and fueled by the pain in my story.

    Like a phoenix from the ashes, I arise renewed.
    The common disregard, expedites my transition.

    You can be entertained, heightened and fueled
    But, I hope you made room for some massive revision.
    ... Not Ever Again...

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    Re: Revision

    Quote Originally Posted by Peach_follows View Post
    I hope you made room for some massive revision.

    That is great, I am going to use that phrase, someday. Of course in philosophy I have been that way for awhile.

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