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    The rise of the demon within?

    You start to realize something arising from within,
    you don't know what it is,
    however you know it is there.

    You try to reason with it,
    You try to push it down,
    However at the slightest annoyance you expload.

    Things you never done in your life,
    Things you never want to do,
    Are being done right in front of you.

    You are arguing more intently,
    Yelling louder and bolder,
    Threatening with a twist of your body and a raise of your fist.

    You try and control it but you cant.
    Your in the open, surrounded by things you would not want to be.
    However your only weapon is your fists.

    Words wont do anything, you tried that.
    Walking away wont work either, tried and failed.
    So the only option left is fight.

    Do you fight?
    Do you die?
    Do you leave all your friends behind?

    Sorry spur of the moment again I know it is cut off but I cant think of anymore to add to it thanks for reading please tell me what you thought.
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    Re: The rise of the demon within?

    Whoa....the words are amazing in this poem.....they are so intense...
    Even though you have a couple of spelling mistakes there........the poem is very nicely done and the words align pretty well with the title.....
    Overall..very nicely done!!!
    DO NOT MAKE ME UNLEASH MY INNER DEMON

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    Re: The rise of the demon within?

    That's amazing you are such an excellent writer. Let me know next time you post one, kk?

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    Re: The rise of the demon within?

    anger is a double edged sword with good and bad
    points your explanation shows the bad points when
    your body goes numb and your not there any more
    somone else is atleast thats how you feel.

    you see the awful things you do but you cant stop
    them almost like a guyser of rage that cant be tapped
    because of the pressure that has built up to the point
    that no amount of apology'swilll make it ok again.

    i would go on but i would be ranting about something
    i know to much about but this poem is awesome i love it very muchi cant wait to read another
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: The rise of the demon within?

    there is another posted from a while ago called re-awoken pain if your interested. sorry for the anger within but gotta let it out somehow.
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