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    Re: The road...

    o.< grammar and spelling!!!

    sorry ray-chan..I'm very anal when it comes to that type of stuff..

    Overall excellent poem!! Speaks of enlightment...Very much like Wolf's Rain's 'Paradise'.

    Nice poem Ray! Continue writing your poems! They're great! :]

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    Thx..where's them mistakes..can u point them out pls?
    i wanna know what mistakes i have done..

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    Re: The road...

    Nice poem, the only suggestions I have would be to change marchs to march. Change Withouth to without, and change mists to mist and separate eventhough. Other than a couple spelling mistakes nice job on the poem!

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    Re: The road...

    ooh sheesh i did not know i made mistake as simple as that,...
    i typed 2 fast... sheesh...

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