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    Romio and Juliet revised!

    before i begine i would like to state that this poem is from william shakespear
    i revised it some and add'ed my own words as a tribute to him.this was his writting's
    way beofre i thought about this. so i am only doing a revised version. so it will be shorter than his.


    What love hath came from yonder heart wich no one can receive
    but a heart that has welcomed it such as my heart has done for you.
    Your hair smelling of sweet jasmine that sways in the in the wind,
    face that is soft to the touch and is flawless in comparason to
    the most beautfull art in the world,a smile that could tame a beast
    and mealt the coldest of heart's.

    Oh juliet my love how i long to be with you on this day
    in question to hold you in my arm'sand enjoy the eternal
    bliss of never ending love and the caress ofof your hand
    as you stroke my face with such loving attentioni sigh inside
    as i think of you and need you touch to satisfy my passion
    and lust for you if only for a moment i would treasure it for a life time.

    The wind now whisper's your name as i aproach your humble
    abode to try and win your favour and your heart there have
    been to many night's alone for me to just walk away now
    i will go through hell and the rising moon above how i
    love you juliet to embrace you as we runaway through
    the night from our family plight's and quarrel's and to live
    together in love and peace with no coruption or hatred
    of ken or partake in any feudes that would break a
    heart as pure as yours.

    I now aproach your balcony and wait for your sweet voice
    to beckon me so i stop this these thought's of you and me
    and prepare for a happy future with you. death itself can
    never separate us i hear your voice now as i aproach my heart is
    happy we will live forever .


    i did this as a tribute to Shakespear and for love everywhere
    i hope what i wrote would be apoved by shakespear if he was living.
    anyway all comment's and critics welcome and i hope i did better this time
    than the last one.
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Romio and Juliet revised!

    That is so sweet.I loved it. You really did an awesome job with it.

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    Re: Romio and Juliet revised!

    thank you for the comment
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Romio and Juliet revised!

    it's sweet and lovely~~~
    man, you're romantic~!!!! >.<
    too much sugar for sheep~^^
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    Re: Romio and Juliet revised!

    there is no such thing as
    to much sugar
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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    Re: Romio and Juliet revised!

    colorful use of words, and good usage of old english., /. orverall its shakespear material,
    its fun to use those words like that. lol,

    good work.^_^

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    Re: Romio and Juliet revised!

    thank you and yea it is
    because guys really knew how
    to be romantic back then. but i think
    some guy's are still like that today
    but its rare
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and all your demons
    I'll be the one to protect you from a will to survive and a voice of reason
    I'll be the one to protect you from your enemies and your choices son
    They're one in the same, I must isolate you...
    Isolate and save you from yourself

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