Thread: Romio and Juliet revised!

before i begine i would like to state that this poem is from william shakespear
i revised it some and add'ed my own words as a tribute to him.this was his writting's
way beofre i thought about this. so i am only doing a revised version. so it will be shorter than his.


What love hath came from yonder heart wich no one can receive
but a heart that has welcomed it such as my heart has done for you.
Your hair smelling of sweet jasmine that sways in the in the wind,
face that is soft to the touch and is flawless in comparason to
the most beautfull art in the world,a smile that could tame a beast
and mealt the coldest of heart's.

Oh juliet my love how i long to be with you on this day
in question to hold you in my arm'sand enjoy the eternal
bliss of never ending love and the caress ofof your hand
as you stroke my face with such loving attentioni sigh inside
as i think of you and need you touch to satisfy my passion
and lust for you if only for a moment i would treasure it for a life time.

The wind now whisper's your name as i aproach your humble
abode to try and win your favour and your heart there have
been to many night's alone for me to just walk away now
i will go through hell and the rising moon above how i
love you juliet to embrace you as we runaway through
the night from our family plight's and quarrel's and to live
together in love and peace with no coruption or hatred
of ken or partake in any feudes that would break a
heart as pure as yours.

I now aproach your balcony and wait for your sweet voice
to beckon me so i stop this these thought's of you and me
and prepare for a happy future with you. death itself can
never separate us i hear your voice now as i aproach my heart is
happy we will live forever .


i did this as a tribute to Shakespear and for love everywhere
i hope what i wrote would be apoved by shakespear if he was living.
anyway all comment's and critics welcome and i hope i did better this time
than the last one.