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Reply With QuoteThis is one long poem, but I like it I was wondering when this poem was going to end man that is one long poem atleast it's the longest one I read so far. Pretty good, cold there you got me shaking half to death. ^_^
Could you just look deep into my eyes?
There lays the truth, no lies
My eyes is filled with hatred and cold
If this ever keeps up, I will not have a soul
Keep on hurting me, I won't cry
I won't just stand there, I'll fight
The wounds deep within me remains a scar
I can do this by myself, I have to run far
Everytime I found a good path, it stops there
A wall covers up, stopping me there
I can't...
And I won't stop there
I'll break it down and tear
And I can't let this wall surround me
This heartless, cold person I'll soon to be
I have to run, run away
I won't let this get in my way
Could you just look deep within my heart
This cold, lifeless place is my park
My memories speak the truth, no lies
Cold and bitterness within my own eyes
Try to hurt me, I won't cry
I won't just stand there, I'll fight
The wounds deep within me remains a scar
I can't do this by myself, I have to run far
Everything I found a good path, it stops there
A wall covers up, stopping me there
I can't...
And I won't stop there
I'll break it down and tear
And I can't let this wall surround me
This heartless, cold person I'll soon to be
I have to run, run away
I won't let this get in my way
Last edited by For3v3r_Lost; Sep 13, 2006 at 07:46 PM.
"I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."
This is one long poem, but I like it I was wondering when this poem was going to end man that is one long poem atleast it's the longest one I read so far. Pretty good, cold there you got me shaking half to death. ^_^
Last edited by kenchi18; Sep 13, 2006 at 07:50 PM. Reason: Change up!!!!!!!!!
Your life means nothing to me.
Long poem, but nice use of words ... creates a nice image in my head ... nice use of techniques too! ^^ 5/5!!
thanks! Glad you both liked it! I wrote it today during detention. I was so bored. lol
"I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."
Great use of imagery, and wording of this poem is awesome! It makes me feel like running away, but then I run into an obstacle that I can get around so either I give up or fight! This poem is awesome!
hey, i really liked your poem ^^ it's awsome
Thank you both! I'm glad you liked it. =)
"I love you with all my heart that I can't explain how much in words."
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