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    Runaway

    Could you just look deep into my eyes?
    There lays the truth, no lies
    My eyes is filled with hatred and cold
    If this ever keeps up, I will not have a soul
    Keep on hurting me, I won't cry
    I won't just stand there, I'll fight
    The wounds deep within me remains a scar
    I can do this by myself, I have to run far

    Everytime I found a good path, it stops there
    A wall covers up, stopping me there
    I can't...

    And I won't stop there
    I'll break it down and tear
    And I can't let this wall surround me
    This heartless, cold person I'll soon to be
    I have to run, run away
    I won't let this get in my way

    Could you just look deep within my heart
    This cold, lifeless place is my park
    My memories speak the truth, no lies
    Cold and bitterness within my own eyes
    Try to hurt me, I won't cry
    I won't just stand there, I'll fight
    The wounds deep within me remains a scar
    I can't do this by myself, I have to run far

    Everything I found a good path, it stops there
    A wall covers up, stopping me there
    I can't...

    And I won't stop there
    I'll break it down and tear
    And I can't let this wall surround me
    This heartless, cold person I'll soon to be
    I have to run, run away
    I won't let this get in my way
    Last edited by For3v3r_Lost; Sep 13, 2006 at 07:46 PM.
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    Re: Runaway

    This is one long poem, but I like it I was wondering when this poem was going to end man that is one long poem atleast it's the longest one I read so far. Pretty good, cold there you got me shaking half to death. ^_^
    Last edited by kenchi18; Sep 13, 2006 at 07:50 PM. Reason: Change up!!!!!!!!!
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    Re: Runaway

    Long poem, but nice use of words ... creates a nice image in my head ... nice use of techniques too! ^^ 5/5!!

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    Re: Runaway

    thanks! Glad you both liked it! I wrote it today during detention. I was so bored. lol
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    Re: Runaway

    Great use of imagery, and wording of this poem is awesome! It makes me feel like running away, but then I run into an obstacle that I can get around so either I give up or fight! This poem is awesome!

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    Re: Runaway

    hey, i really liked your poem ^^ it's awsome




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    Re: Runaway

    Thank you both! I'm glad you liked it. =)
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